Grab her

someone kinda inspired me to write this so thanks

 

Grab her 

 

 

Try to be perfect

You never can be

There is always

Someone to blame

It maybe you

it maybe me

I’d Put my guard down

But it wouldn’t matter

My hearts to fast

       You’d never grab her

Reviews

[yinseriv]

Good structure and flow.

[Chloe Madison Taylor.]

ouch.
i dont know if its supposed to be depressing or not,
but it was.

[.]

Hey great job with this- kind of humorous in a way hehe, but nicely done with it. Also, danke, for the awesome review ya gave. Much appreciated, and glad ya liked it!

Mikey

[None]

Maybe you wouldn't "grab her" but with a little warmth and charm--who knows!! A great write that lets the reader go behind the scenes. Very enjoyable!

[George Love]

It's got a rap style beat to it when you read it aloud. Maybe to might be would make it pop a little harder. I can hear this as a rap tune!

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

i like it ...
i would suggest though - instead of using 'maybe' change them to 'might be' --
but that's just my opinion...

nicely done

[Jessica Snider]

.......

[Katrina]

I like it. A lot.
Period.