Wild Pines

going from just chill to even colder

lets compete our minds with empty roads

nerve thrust speeding faster than neon glows

i left my spirits loose to run like fire through the woods

and they went off like sirens beating under my hoods

my hitched hunters tried to break free but couldn't thrive

so this idea of being awake gave up on at all being alive

my wild wolves even ran to the places i could never go

so i let them take control of my voids every time it snows

the pines growing faster and deeper on my skin

these spirits trying to console the hollowness through softer spins

there's a figure at the end of the cliff backing around

and all the motions fighting against it pulling sounds

as the cloud set up higher, the eyes turn lighter and lighter

my head turn little lower, the smirk goes even brighter and brighter

Reviews

[June bug]

I love the rhyme scheme, informative piece in a way. enjoyed....

[grace]

Thank you so much dear!

[FGFRANKLIN]

Life and learning are beautiful. Experience certainly is the best teacher but she can be a brutal headmistress. To quote Alanis Morrissette, "You live, you learn." But there is such thing as burnout in the darkness, like a Kansas farmhouse burning to hell in flames on the emptiness of the vast prairie. It's barely a speck in the night, growing as you get closer...and you start to wonder...if anyone survived the blaze, anyone at all.

[grace]

I agree. Life can be beautiful and challenging at the same time. Thank you so much for reading my poem and sharing your thoughts about it :)

[lessa (kenzie)]

the pines growing faster and deeper on my skin
these spirits trying to console the hollowness through softer spins

Love this part, this is so poetic and full of emotion

[grace]

Thank you so much kenzie, i see the way you are reading and understanding my poems deeply and in a beautiful way. And also, our choices for the lines from my poems are really similar and this thing makes me so happy. That really shows that you really took the poem very well. Thanks again for making time for reading my poems. It means a lot.

[lessa (kenzie)]

not a problem...

[emmajoy]

' the pines growing faster and deeper on my skin - these spirits trying to console the hollowness through softer spins.. '

You have the skill and imagination to become a great poet over time, grace. With 'Wild Pines' you've created a near creepy flow of scenes with real flair. I'm truly amazed!

[grace]

Thank you so much for appreciating dear Emma! I felt really contented reading your generous reviews! It means a lot

[emmajoy]

Your words make me see.. and think. :)

[grace]

oh that's such a compliment!

[poetgurl]

i left my spirits loose to run like fire through the woods
and they went off like sirens beating under my hoods

I love this part, This is really well written, enjoyed this read

[grace]

Thank you so much! It means a lot! I am really glad that you enjoyed reading it :)

[light and ashes]

"my wild wolves even ran to the places i could never go
so i let them take control of my voids every time it snows."

We should all be careful of letting our wolves take control.

[grace]

I know right.. we should.. thank you so much for reading my poem!

[light and ashes]

You're welcome

[TheEvilSoul]

Just when i thought I couldn't love your work anymore!

[grace]

hahaha! thank you so much for saying that! you are really a beautiful soul

[Chris Shaw]

Rhyming couplets work well here grace. I enjoyed the emotional journey. Thank you for sharing.

Chris

[grace]

Thank you so much for reading this poem Chris! It means a lot! :)

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome grace.

[shadrach hah]

Hi Grace, one can feel deeply the emotions you portray through your wonderful words. Your piece has such a wonderful flow and I love the content of your rhymes. A wonderful journey through your outstanding words. May your heart ever sing, whatever the emotion. Have a wonderful Thursday. Hugs always....Mike.

[grace]

Thank you so much Mike. You're really sweet and make me smile every time with your generous reviews!

[shadrach hah]

Hi Grace, you are so welcome, You sing such powerful songs. Have a wonderful Friday. Hugs always....Mike.