Dorothy Says There's No Place Like

April 13, 2o1o / 5:47 pm

I have my hands
In baskets you've
Never heard of
And for the milli-
Second it took
Me to jump from
This conclusion
To that solution
You felt dead inside.

I can't build bridges
From recycled rose
Bushes and to expect
Roads of gold is both
Expected and respected.
You ration emotion as if
Insurance form half-life
Calculations hang in the
Balance. Jennifer Lopez's
A*s isn't such a big deal
Anymore. I heard you
Still have that picture
Of me. I'm a flash-drive
Memory.

Reviews

[Juliette Cross]

the first part is so wonderful, and i mean full of wonder. it kind of knocked me over except i was sitting down. the baskets and jumping, we are literally there with you, trying to make sense of it all and then the word "dead" appears, and this lovely field we are in turns dark.
we see that emotions are cold and hard, metal. and the dream is gone.
dorothy is disenchanted.

[Sonia Aurelio]

I like your style and enjoyed reading this poem! I loved "You ration emotion as if / Insurance form half-life / Calculations hang in the / Balance". First stanza was very intellectual, and I really liked that, we as readers were right there with you.

[Alicante lullaby]

val valish...

[fireblossom]

I like this mucho. It has angles and unexpected thrills...

It makes me feel smart even though I own things made of plastic and only recycle when my cousin calls to say she is coming over.

I think you are like her.

[Jeff Loquist]

You are a pop culture iconoclast. Every word resonates and has meaning in this. It makes me sad and fills me with laughter at the same time. And you use symbolism I wish I thought of first: "I'm a flash-drive memory". You would think this would make me angry...or at least irritated but it just makes me enjoy your work even more.

[GunMetal]

So great. A very clever write. Vivid in imagery and metaphors.

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very well done...this is where the writer calls us to see inside their world...
and feel

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is very good. Each line with a purpose. So many lines stood out. The last line made the poem complete. A fun poem to be able to read. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[wolfshrew]

Oh goodness, this was brilliantly written. The first stanza swallowed me.