(99) A Crushed Rose

A crushed rose lies on the snow
Broken petals red like blood
She lies defeated, a lost glow
Grasping thorns that cut her skin

Her heart lies hurt and tattered
Only a white robe from the cold
No love, for it never mattered
Her body now a victim to the chill

Feeling rejecting and cast aside
Bitter feelings are now her curse
Like the rose, she feels dead inside
Uncaring of the cruel touch of Winter

No one could mend her ruined heart
No one could now warm this lost soul
She will forever feel she is torn apart
From the uncaring one who did her wrong

copyright Chris Smith 2008

Reviews

[M.Babu]

"Her heart lies hurt and tattered
Only a white robe from the cold
No love, for it never mattered
Her body now a victim to the chill"

"No one could mend her ruined heart
No one could now warm this lost soul
She will forever feel she is torn apart
From the uncaring one who did her wrong"

What a really touching piece my friend! Truly heartfelt and real!

[sarah]

so sad and dark but I can relate to this poem sometimes I feel like I am broken like this, this is flowed amazingly keep writting!

[FJ Davis]

There is beauty and magic, here, Chris--and you conjured them both.

[Robin]

strong emotion flows through this poetic . vivid visuals

[Poeticadia]

The image of the rose and the snow works well here! The last line tells us that little bit more of her sad story.

[BlueberryKisses]

I absolutely love this poem!! Its amazing, I don't have a favourite stanza since each one is awesome in it's own way! But I love the line 'Like the rose, she feels dead inside' Beautiful, Great job :)

[Hatchling]

This is great!!

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. Woman and roses can be used in description. Both are beautiful and need tender loving care. A sad poem. When you have a broken heart. Hard to rise up again. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Ashley]

beautifully written. the comparison of the rose to a woman's broken heart is incredibly poetic and you have executed this wonderfully.

[Hayley]

Wow this poem really spoke to me.. I love each stanza and the wording in each. The descriptions are really effective, and something so fragile as a rose makes for a wonderful poem

[SpokenWord]

Like a rose that will never have life again her heart breaks in this poetic storm of emotions of loss and pain. We do know the heart will heal but at the time it feels damaged for ever. Excellent write and comparison well done!