I Miss You

I Miss You

A Poem by Aly
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I hadn't heard from My Man in awhile and this was the frustration and sadness I felt.

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I wonder how your doing?
Are you thinking of me?

You really aren't talking
You haven't told me how you are
No letter not even a card.

I'm standing still
and feeling time past me by
I'm waiting for some kind of response
There isn't much to do
I kept myself busy

But at night I'm always thinking of you

No matter you are
No matter where I am

I'm ususally always thinking of you.

I am barely breathing
As I go on through the days

Whenever I saw your picture
I tried to look away 

You were the sun
You are my air

I wonder how often 
I tried to tell myself "Act like you don't care"

I can't do it. 
Not when I'm in love and missing you.

© 2012 Aly


Author's Note

Aly
I was very frustrated and sad at the time when I wrote this.
I hadn't heard from My Man in awhile.
But I have now. :)
But hope everyone likes it.

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I liked this very much..and a lot of people that are in love can relate to this so easily xD It's very sweet and I like how it flows. I do see one little mistake, i think you left out "where" when you say "No matter you are" other than that its a very beautiful piece.

Great Job

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

Thank you
It's lovely sad and full of longing for the one your love.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

:) Thank you. I certainly hope me and him can be together when he gets home. Right now we aren't off.. read more
Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

ohhhh wow sounds like a story in itself :) I really hope it works out for you :)
Aly

11 Years Ago

:) It's a long beautiful story :) I hope it works out as well.
Great emotion through a display of wistful love.

P.S. First Line, your should be you're ?

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

Thank you and yeah the first line should be that. Haha. My mistake. Thanks for reading and reviewing.. read more
I certainly can empathize with your frustration, as expressed in this piece. You successfully avoided the overstated verbiage usually associated with these emotions.
I liked the work very much.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Please read "No One Will Ever Love You Like I Do" and "You"
Love is such a hard thing, and this poem expresses it beautifully! Love does crazy things to us! =) nice job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

Thank you! :)
Thanks for reading and reviewing :)
It's always hard to write these kind of peices, atleast for me. You always miss your sgnificant other, and you try NOT to think about them, but you really can't stop yourself from thinking about them. It's impossible, no matter how hard you try, and writing these poems usualy make it worse, atleast for me.

ANYWAYS, great job conveying emotions. Nice flow, and definelty well written. Great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

Exactly! Writing is the only reason why I haven't died from keeping all my pain inside. Thank you! M.. read more
David the writer

11 Years Ago

Np, thank you for sharing
Nice sad piece honestly reflecting your love.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

Thank you.

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Added on December 31, 2012
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Tags: Missing, Friend, Love, Sadness

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