A Winter Night

A Winter Night

A Story by Renay

This is a piece of flash fiction about a young teenage girl who longs for warmth and love. I have gone back and edited out the spelling errors and did a bit of revising.


Sandra walked along the grassy bank of the pond towards her favorite maple tree, which was located just a few feet from the pond and just out of sight from her house, and her family.  The yellow moon's light the only light she had to guide her on this cold damp night.  As she walked she navigated amongst the holes that the neighborhood children had dug on their search for the pirates buried treasure and her face tightened into a mischievous smile.  For it was because of her and her need to be rid of her annoying little brother that now all of the neighborhood children believed that long ago pirates buried treasure somewhere around the pond. 


As she dodged the holes the moon peeked out from the clouds as if it were playing a game of Peek-A-Boo with a small child, and her thoughts started rambling as they always do when she reached her favorite spot underneath the maple tree that at this time of year stood tall and proud, stretching its cold, leafless limbs toward the night sky.


Finally all alone and out of sight Sandra stopped underneath the tree and looked across the glassy black top of the water and into the woods behind it.  As she stood there thinking, a slight winter breeze rustled the dead leaves that were still on the ground, and she felt her long blonde hair stirring so softly, as if the wind were playing with it running invisible fingers through her soft silky blonde hair. Her thoughts were about how she yelled at her mother this afternoon, over what exactly she doesn't remember, of how good breakfast smelled with the homemade biscuits baking in the oven and bacon frying in the iron skillet, of how warm the towels felt when she took them out of the dryer, and how her heart fluttered oh so softly as she held her phone tight to her ear so that she wouldn't miss not one syllable of her boyfriend's sweet reassuring words of love.  She stood there as she let her thoughts also wander to the weather and how much rain they had recived this winter, and how she missed the warm southern summer nights when the crickets chirped and the frogs croaked out by the pond. Yes, standing there she thought of everything and yet at the same time of nothing at all.


As she gazed across the backside of the pond she jumped when all of a sudden a pair of golden eyes that glowed like the sun itself had divided in half. A soft cry of alarm escaped from her lips as she jumped ever so slightly backward. Almost loosing her step and falling backwards if not for a small invisible touch that held her, keeping her from falling.


The eyes stared right at her never blinking, never closed as she noticed that they appear to be about midway up the tall pine trees.  About a foot or so over the bushes that grow close to the ground.  Yet there weren't any branches for something, anything to sit on.  As if the eyes actually floated in mid air. 


"No way can this be happening.  No way at all."  She whispered as the eyes floated closer to the pond.  She knew that she should be scared, that she should turn and run.  Run back up the bank and into her house locking the door behind her.


Yet she didn't, for she wasn't scared at all.  In fact an errie calm came over her.  Reassuring her there isn't any danger.  Such a warm comforting feeling was this that she wasn't aware that the eyes were directly over the middle of the pond.  Instead of just eyes there was a glow that took the shape of a body, a golden body with two arms, two legs and a very human male like appearance. She felt warm and comforted as she stood there staring straight into those golden eyes that glowed.


"Come to me."  The creature whispered as his arms reached out to her, drawing her to him so that she too is now directly over the middle of the ponds black glassy surface.  Just a few feet off of it. 


"You are gorgeous."  She said noticing just how human he his.  His warm golden glowing eyes framed by golden hair that glowed around perfectly chiseled freatures.  His warm muscular arms held her close to his golden skin.  The heat from his body engulfed her, radiated through out her as she leaned her head back, parting her lips, eagerly awaiting his mouth to take hers in a deep longing kiss.  All the while, his eyes, those intoxicating golden eyes never left hers as they searched deep within her soul.  Searched as if what they will find there was a matter of life or death, for whom she wasn't sure.


That is how she felt as she hovered with this creature that came from no where and yet at the same time felt very familiar to her.  She wanted to tell him to take her back with him, back from wherever he came from, but no words came. 


I hope he can read my mind she thought. He smiled lovingly at her and gently, oh so gently brought his lips to hers.  His lips brushed against hers as she felt that she could stay in this suspended state forever. Then she heard it.  Faintly and far away at first, then closer and louder. 


"Sandra!  Sandra come back!"  She felt a hand on her shoulder pulling her around and she was no longer in the arms of that perfect creature with the warm glowing golden eyes.  She was back on the bank, in the cold dampness of the winter's night with the moon now hidden completely behind the clouds.  In front of her stood her annoying little brother who was sent to look for her since she was gone for so long.


"Come on!  It's time to get back in the house."  He told her, but before she can leave she turns back towards the pond and the golden creature is gone.  No longer could she see those golden eye, leaving her to wonder "Was it real?"

© 2011 Renay

Author's Note

I welcome all feedback. If you like it please let me know why. If you don't like it please let me know why. Afterall it is only through feedback that my writing can improve. Thanks.

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