Father of mine.

From start to finish

It's been nothing but a wish

from a child's heart

but you drove yourself apart

From beginning to end

It's been something you can't mend

But it was never really there

you never gave it a chance, and that's not fair

You turned your back on me,

became something I can no longer see

You were never there

You never gave a care

And when you did show your face

you really kept your space

Oh the lies that you told

they did get very old

Even through a child's eyes

I could see through all your lies

you said you love me

but I know it's not to be

Without you I've lived just fine

you were too drowned in your own wine

A child swallowed in guilt and sadness

I realized my thoughts were madness

It wasn't I but you

Who got up and flew

you left me all alone

and now I'm on my own

I realized how much I don't need you

It was my love for you, you slew

I no longer have a want or a need for you

There's nothing else that you can do

To try and win my love back

Understanding is now what you lack

You don't get why I feel this way,

and there's nothing more that I can say.

Author's Note

I wrote this after I had a fight with my dad (over facebook that is because he doesn't call or anything) >_> anyway I did put thought into this. tell me what you think?

Reviews

[samurai212]

I wish I had a trophy to give

[Dalebear]

I know what you feel in this poem and it hit me hard, my dad was abusive alcoholic and my mum was his helper. But we are better then them. I can feel the pain he caused and I can tell the emotional pain inside every line. I never grown up with a family been in care for ages. But keep up the good work you are talented writer.

Dalebear

[Kat]

This hits very close to home with me because I am having problems with my father and have been for a while. This poem really explains how I feel towards my father and is very expressing to me. It relieved me a bit of what I was feeling towards him just a few minutes ago. A great write and very emotional. -Kat

[Elwina]

It uses simple words, just like a child that would speak to her father, and that makes it all the more real to me.
When being abandonned as a child, i'm thinking it is always a simple explanation that is concluded in our head. He doesn't love me ? I'm not good enough ?
Growing up, we begin to hope it was a complicated situation that drew the father away. We end up realizing, it was always simple. It's a choice to leave, instead of choosing to stay.
You painted this feeling just perfectly. Lovely, sad poem.

[PaperHearts]

This was a really touching poem. An absent father is something that I can relate to, and so reading this poem certainly hit a raw nerve with me. I did think that the rhyming seemed a little bit forced at some moments during the poem, but for the most part, the emotional intensity of the piece made up for it. Great work,
~PaperHearts

[Cynthia]

That's not suck at all! I think it's a great work insteand!

[YouoweYoupay]

It does not suck. It was very touching. Reminds me of someone I know. Being shut away is a horrible feeling, develops an aura of beauty and melancholy as you get used to it. I'm sorry you feel that way.

[KayDennyy!(:]

this is wonderful.

[My Fair Lady]

This is a wonderful work. Do not doubt your ability to touch the very heart of the reader with this raw and emotional piece. A child's perspective. So heartfelt. Really wonderful.

[Ron]

Does not suck at all. Look at it as if you were a child. I did. I pretended I was nine and my father left. The words plucked hard at the heart as a child would have plucked them. Each line between a sob and childlike needs to question and blame. No it does not suck at all. On the contrary it is from little gems like this a diamond can grow. Keep reading, keep writing, fulfil this undoubted potential.