Lies

It's all a lie.

Another day goes by.

 

 

You don't care.

 

 

What happens.

 

 

It means nothing to you.

 

 

I'm just another freak.

 

 

What I say doesn't matter.

 

 

What I do is worthless.

 

 

Why can't you see?

 

 

Open your eyes.

 

 

To what is in front of you.

 

 

Don't push me away.

 

 

Your killing yourself slowly.

 

 

Stop the madness and just surrender.

 

 

Stop living a lie.

 

 

A fantasy world.

 

 

You need to go back to reality.

 

 

You love me.

 

 

You just don't know it yet.

Author's Note

Well I worked hard on this so I hope everyone likes this. If you don't say what you think. I enjoy having people tell me what they really think. No beating around the bush.

Reviews

[Marie Harrison]

Does sound like a narcissist. Great write!

[Brandon]

Very good, i liked the ;ast few lines the most. Great work, keep it up.



100/100

[The Cute 1]

i love it

[Ruth]

A good poem :)
Raw and honest, conveys the emotions really well, powerful wording too:)
xx

[DeathByChoice]

I thought the overall story was interesting and expressed uniquely. "You love me./ You just don't know it yet." The only thing; I don't think every line should have been a sentence, especially "Open your eyes./ To what is in front of you." It could just be one sentence. "Another day goes by./ You don't care." and "What happens./ It means nothing to you." could be a semicolon and "Stop living a lie./ A fantasy world." Could just be a comma, they don't need to be different sentences.
But other than that, good job!

[SimonitroX]

Sounds like a girl in high school desperate to get the attention to some handsome guy and he seems to be ignoring her even though, he don't know her much.

What a narcassist! It's a fun read and in a way, it feels kinda sad to have the feeling that you're left in the dust.

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Kelly,

Ah the madness....I do love madness. It's filling and exciting. I asked the question earlier to gage where you are compared to where I was. Maybe doesn't make sense yet but after reading your story I placed you advanced to where you told me. Suprising. You poetry is excellent. I like the personal flare to it. The honesty behind it.

Well Done.

Regards,

Matthew