Remember

 

Remember

by

Jose M. Euvin

 

 

“Just sit down and imagine”

 

How proud you were

When I took my first steps

 

How

I love you mommy

Melted your heart away

 

Remember how cute

I looked

On my first date

How you wiped my tears

After burning the cake

 

Did you ever imagine?

Walking

Holding my hand

Reading me stories

While tucking me in bed

 

“Reality is”

 

You gave me warmth

And took it away

My body you ripped

And tore it to shreds

As you heard my screams

Not once did you pray

 

If there's really a God

I hope

She’ll forgive your mistakes

 

For my life

You destroyed

How selfish of you

 

“Time has come in a medical room”

 

As I start to face death

   

I’m screaming in silence

My eyes never open

To a world full of violence

 

You would’ve been proud

Of your baby one day

We create to destroy

And

My life you've taken away

 

Reviews

[Spoken]

I think the beginning confuses the rest of the poem a bit because you write as if the child was born

Remember how proud you were
When I took my first steps

How "I love you mommy"
Melt your heart away

Remember how cute I looked
On my first date

How you wiped my tears
After burning the cake

but i see your intention here, you want the mother to see what she has lost and/or missed out on. I think if the reader just looks at it as a mother who murdered her child it would be perfect.
that said I think it's a well written piece. "we create to destroy" how true. and i like the font change at the end, like a small child speaking those words

[Barbara Walker]

This is a very intense poem for a very serious subject. Your words convey your feeling very descriptively. That's a beautiful picture accompaining the poem. your poems always have pictures so appropriate to the poem's subject. Barbara

[PoemRodent]

Overall a good read, keep up the good work and feel free to send me a request when ever..

Love and Thoughts,

Dostani

[El-Enano]

Confucing yet sad.

[pal]

"You gave me warmth:And took it away:My body you ripped:And tore it to shreds:As you heard my screams"

very nicely put.. how the created soul cries.. when life ends.. in death..

Souls wait.. for long for body. Life an accident. Death is certain. Many many many millions of souls.. in que waiting.. this is infact hell. The soul knows the pain.. the long journey it has to take in vacuum wandering.. wondering.. when that chance again to enter the womb.. mother... abortion is biggest crime on humanity.

nice poem Yooooo
i dont know how many "oooo" i have to put for your name ..lol
pal

[Tessa Anne]

wow. very very VERY emotional. I definatly felt that poem, i liked how it was soft, and loving in the begining, then at the end you were all like eff you mom! lol but i did LOVE it

[Abluetopazdragon]

I liked this poem, altough at first I was confused by how the child was born and then destroyed, other than that I think it is a good read and thank you for sending it my way.

[Kevin Colaprete]

Overall pretty good, though I disagree with your viewpoint on abortion.

Two things to say about this stanza:

If theirs really a God
I hope
She has compassion in you
For my life
You destroyed
How selfish of you

If theirs really a God should be altered to
If there's really a God.

Second, the part about you referring to God as a she: Is this she person supposed to represent a God because she can let the baby live or die? Is this just a mistake? Or do you believe that God might be a woman?

I'm just curious, doesn't matter too much to me as I'm an agnostic myself.

[KG]

This poem is amazing i know some people that are pro-choice and pro-life, i am a person that is pro-life keep up the good work.

[Natalie C]

Oh wow, what a vividly deep piece, to me it just screams "abortion" I might be wrong, but that's the message that I got from this. I loved the way you started this, as if the child was born but when you read further, the reality of this child becomes clearer and clearer.

Great piece of writing!

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

powerful writing. i think your message is clear.