One Last Breath

...one last breath as death takes life's place..

A stranger walks in the night. 

Up to me, pulls out a knife. 

Before my mind streams a light. 

Before my heart a flash of life. 

Against a wall (sadly) I am trapped. 

The knife is penetrated inside of my fleeing back. 

A scream of terror escapes my mouth. 

Life giving death all of its clout. 

Pain that is impossible to believe. 

But not the blood running down my sleeve. 

I turn and stare at a strangers face. 

A blank expression that is not fazed. 

He then uses his knife in creative ways. 

Making sure that I will have no more days. 

My cries are muffled by its laughter. 

Stabbing deep.. faster and faster. 

My body, it now starts to tremble. 

A horrific pain inside of my temple. 

The lungs in my chest, no longer move. 

The beats of my heart, they take their last cue. 

Into my head, my eyes roll back. 

Darkness then... starts to attack. 

In a sudden shock, my eyes open wide. 

I now see a turning fan, up high. 

All around, light now starts to stream. 

Its not heaven. 

It was all a dream. 

- DD

Reviews

[Ladysue]

wow this was certainly very vivid and terrifying to say the least...but you written it so well...

[Jess Quna]

This has certainly peaked my interest!
I like this poem so much,
don't ask me why as I don't really know,
I just like it...
I hope you write more ^^
Good luck
Greetings

Sarah

[Seepz]

Whoa! Excellent flow, the words are gripping..

[Sweets]

This is wonderful
I loved the ending =)

[emmajoy]

'My cries are muffled by its laughter.
Stabbing deep.. faster and faster. '

At those lines I should have thought but, there was no time, had to read on to the end ... and, oh my, what a finish!

Dreams and what they can to us, yes .. but, this is more a nightmare created with powerful words ..

[luciddreamer]

visually painfully dark...chilling good write :)
Peace
Robin

[No regret]

i like this .. your writing style forced me to visualize ,, he was moving his knife round n round .. wow

[Matthews Reggie]

hmmm, i was in horror, in sentimental condition, in pain and "It was all dream" came and blew it up.... Brilliant work... Did u ever get stabbed for real? Or was it all creative power???

[An owl on the moon]

You create this world of pain.. of anxiety.. the fear of being attacked and pursued in the darkness.. So powerfully spoken into the then waking sensation!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

That's a nightmare! lol I like the twist at the end....sort of brings us out of the dying...resurrection in verse! Great piece.