One Last Breath

...one last breath as death takes life's place..

A stranger walks in the night. 

Up to me, pulls out a knife. 

Before my mind streams a light. 

Before my heart a flash of life. 

Against a wall (sadly) I am trapped. 

The knife is penetrated inside of my fleeing back. 

A scream of terror escapes my mouth. 

Life giving death all of its clout. 

Pain that is impossible to believe. 

But not the blood running down my sleeve. 

I turn and stare at a strangers face. 

A blank expression that is not fazed. 

He then uses his knife in creative ways. 

Making sure that I will have no more days. 

My cries are muffled by its laughter. 

Stabbing deep.. faster and faster. 

My body, it now starts to tremble. 

A horrific pain inside of my temple. 

The lungs in my chest, no longer move. 

The beats of my heart, they take their last cue. 

Into my head, my eyes roll back. 

Darkness then... starts to attack. 

In a sudden shock, my eyes open wide. 

I now see a turning fan, up high. 

All around, light now starts to stream. 

Its not heaven. 

It was all a dream. 

- DD

Reviews

[Brighid an Lasair]

This is like I nightmare that I would have, intensely vivid, breath taking, but still leaves you wondering. As a reader, I can put myself into this piece and feel it, see it. Great work!

[Ann John]

emotional perfection. i love this one.

[thatbryngirl]

Wow!! I looove this! Very.. oh what's the word.. iono but it kept me reading :) I really enjoyed this. Very deep and yea.. i liked the twist at the end. so vivid and real. great job.

[Kelly M.]

WOW This was really well written. Once again..You just keep getting better and better. I love how you talk about a stranger. That would be so scary if that really did happen. I was relieved at the end that it was just a dream :) Just like that new song that is out. Whatever it's called but its saying it was just a dream!

[Brittany W]

The rhyme scheme was great, the imagery was also good, it really pulled me in and the end was good, i liked how it ended, great job.

[Isericanormal]

i just freaking love this.! perfectly captured emotion. amazing job. a fav of mine for sure.

[EMP]

this is so good. the rhyme is amazing, the subject brilliant and the words powerful. what more could you want from a poem? brilliant write. well done.

[Angel Bird]

Wooohaa!!! My heartbeat fast increased with the continuously rising rhythm and flow of this v e r y bad dream experience. Glad it was just a dream...
Excellent write!

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

this was so intense and then the bubble of it popped to eerie