The heroes of today

The heroes of today

A Poem by Emily Faust
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I feel like the heroes of today don't get enough thanks for doing what they do to keep us safe.

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Dear the heroes of today,
Dear the soldiers who give their lives in battle,
Dear the police that round up the cruelties of this world like cattle,
Dear the firemen who would help anyone in need,
Dear the parimedics who help those who hurt and bleed,
Dear the good samaritans who risk their own safety for the safety of others,
I want to say thank you for saving our sisters and brothers.

© 2019 Emily Faust



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Beautiful!
I'm testing out my new video reviews...
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Posted 1 Week Ago


Emily Faust

1 Week Ago

Thank you for the awesome review! Thanks for taking the time to make a video. It really meant alot.
The Gent Called Alex

1 Week Ago

Of course, well done!
-Alex
I absolutely love this poem, appreciate it and am grateful that someone else sees that as it is all too true, they don't ever get the recognition nearly as often as they should. You honor them, and its cool to know also that someone so young realizes and acknowledges their service.

Cute, short, simple, sweet... honoring, respectful and grateful. These are the words to describe the nature of this poem. Nicely done!

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Emily Faust

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much for the review!
Wonderful write, I enjoyed this

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Emily Faust

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for the reviews
Great job! And thank you from a vet.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Emily Faust

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for the review. I was just thinking that they don't get the thanks they deserve for keepin.. read more
Levi Levin

2 Weeks Ago

Your welcome!
This is a good poem. The only problem I have with it is the fireman line and then the fact that the word "the" is repeated too much.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Indeed. Thanks to all of them for their service. Glad someone remembered to do it.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


First off I'd like to say that this is a poem that had to be written in this day and age. Indeed, these folks don't get enough credit for what they do. You should post this somewhere that would be accessible for these kinds of people. I would like to take a moment to point out some way(s) to better this before you do, for it's perfect in execution...just some craft needs to be tweaked:

- Because the first line is essentially introducing who the heroes will be, instead of a comma, put a colon.

-the firemen line ironically doesn't really give them much credit, for that's not all that they do. Also, the good samaritans line already takes care of that point of the message, and it's more powerful there than with the firemen. The firemen need a bit more credit than that. Also, get rid of the "would" because all the other lines state the fact as fact ("soldiers give their lives in battle"; "police round up the cruelties...."; paramedics help those who hurt and bleed"). State a fact about firemen that are characteristically about firemen themselves, so they stand out as something else, for technically speaking, all these "heroes" you've mentioned would "help anyone in need". What make the firemen different in how they do?

-every other "hero" has "who" in the line, but the "police" have "that". This is a poem about looking at these heroes equally, don't get sloppy with the words you use. Also, this might be just my ear, but I feel that "cruelties" should be changed to something monosyllabic....that way the musicality could flow better. But, again, that just might be me. (I laughed at the cattle bit, though, that's brilliant!)

This is stupendous overall! Way - to - go!! Much enjoyed (and appreciated :p)

Posted 3 Weeks Ago



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Emily Faust
Emily Faust

Sun Prairie, WI



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I am a Junior in Highschool. I am 16. I was born on August 4, 2002. I am interested in visual communications. When I was younger, from 4th grade to 9th grade, there was this media program in my commun.. more..

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