Saga of a phantom

Saga of a phantom

A Poem by Bala Gorthi
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For ten words contest

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I died for your love

and became a Phantom.
I wandered like a Moose
in a barren land

until I met a lady with
Clairvoyant vision
who sent me to you.

 I hovered over you
and your new found love
and witnessed your

changed and Frumpy avatar.
I felt shivers in me.

Your harsh words for my dead soul
set my frozen cold heart boil with revenge
and start Curdling.
I suffered many a Spasm that ultimately
broke my solid Apricot hard resolve
to love you forever.

The Bitterness of your words
had sheared the Seven protective layers
of my latent spirit.
Now, I am a phantom supernova.

With all the powers that I now have
I want to possess your fragile lover
for getting that proximity to you

to punish and torment you.


Now you will see how I Mangle your whole

existence with my magical spell
making your frumpy soul diminish to dust.


© 2017 Bala Gorthi



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Those 10 words were very inspirational for you. There must be many broken-hearted phantoms wandering the earth. You have given voice to them, reminding us no to destroy another with broken love.
I hope your supernova phantom relents a bit (and forgives?) his old lover before he completely diminishes her to dust! What a wonderful poem!

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

6 Months Ago

Thank you for visiting and appreciating. I find I have compassion for phantoms and spirits. This was.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

6 Months Ago

Yes, we can often think the most dastardly things in our private minds, but when it comes to action .. read more
Bala Gorthi

6 Months Ago

I agree with you.



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Those 10 words were very inspirational for you. There must be many broken-hearted phantoms wandering the earth. You have given voice to them, reminding us no to destroy another with broken love.
I hope your supernova phantom relents a bit (and forgives?) his old lover before he completely diminishes her to dust! What a wonderful poem!

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

6 Months Ago

Thank you for visiting and appreciating. I find I have compassion for phantoms and spirits. This was.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

6 Months Ago

Yes, we can often think the most dastardly things in our private minds, but when it comes to action .. read more
Bala Gorthi

6 Months Ago

I agree with you.
Very captivating and natural the way you write splendidly and with splendor . You possess the talent...:::))))

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

7 Months Ago

Thank you for your visit and kind and generous words of appreciation for this write.keep visiting.
Sami Khalil

7 Months Ago

K. You are welcome. ...:: )))
You have created quite a story here. The Phantom seems torn between loving the woman who is now frumpy and being angry with her for having a new man in her life. Again, you have gotten all the necessary words in there. Great work. Lydi**

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

7 Months Ago

I am glad you enjoyed the story here. Thank you for visiting and appreciating
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Very intriguing piece, I enjoyed this

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

7 Months Ago

Thank You for visiting and appreciating....
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7 Months Ago

no problem
Yikes! Hi Bala. I, too, felt sorry for the phantom, only to end up feeling sorry for the phantom's 'competition'. The first stanza is my favorite; drew me into the story right away. Well done!

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you very much for enjoying the write. Your words gave pig round for my Phantom's existence. Th.. read more
Wicahpi Iyozaza

10 Months Ago

Always a pleasure! You're welcome!
I always wonder what one can write on ten words theme and you always surprise me by your great attempt in doing so. The plight of that poor soul could be understood...btw I always thought souls are helpless creatures who can just see but can't act on it as most of the souls are usually powerless ;-)
But your Phantom Supernova seems to be a revenge seeking soul who is going to destroy the person who betrayed him.
I actually liked the theme and concept very much. This is a complete piece.
Great one indeed :-) :-)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you very much Manu, for your kind words and the precious visit. I have a lot of compassion for.. read more
Once again you have written an entertaining piece on the basis of the restrictive ten word rule. Reading it took me back to my own ghostly poem, "Spectre", and musing on the contrasting attitudes of both these characters. Yours dwells on feelings of jealousy and vengeance, whereas mine intended to warn and educate. An interesting difference.

Your tale of jilted love and revenge is very well written and a worthy recipient for these ten word contests. Nice work, as always, Bala.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

I think wounded love mostly converts into vengeance and jealousy and many a time leads to crime. Tha.. read more
Beautifully crafted story poem. It is not easy to write when you have to use 10 different words as those words can become an obstruction in free flow of poetry and thoughts but you did it very fine. A class writing. One's mind can totally get absorbed into the feelings of the Phantom by reading this. (It started as pitiful phantom and ended on pitiful lady). Nothing seems forced as it came out very naturally.
Masterful writing. Keep up the good work.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you Michael for your visit and appreciation. I am glad you enjoyed the write.
I think i.. read more
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That's strong and brilliant I could say, And you use given words very well creating a story around, I liked it..:)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you for the visit and review, Surya.
Surya

10 Months Ago

Always a pleasure..:)
Sorry I haven't been around for awhile to read your amazing creativity! This poem is pretty intense! The ten words are unusual & hard to use, but you've put them into a natural order that fits your little rant here. I love the attitude, which is strong & original. Everyone feels jealousy at some point, but you've painted it like a very unusual vessel of surprising intensity here. Your imagery is very powerful & a little bit playful too, despite the vengeance raining down! *smile*

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you Margie, for visiting and reviewing this phantom spirited piece.
I am so glad that.. read more

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