You

I know I'm supposed to be the stronger one.
The one who walks away and leaves things as they are.
But I keep feeling this rope pulling tighter and tighter around my heart.
You know what, it's all because of you.

I put you on a throne.
I believed that I could entrust my heart to you.
You place lies on your tongue as if they were the air you breath.
You don't even know.

Born of wild thorns and severe burns.
You walk as if the world is burning at your feet.
Spewing words of sacred vows and strong views.
You tend to leave everyone else behind.

So the pain I feel is real.
It's a mistake I made.
But it is still all your fault.
You and how fake you really are.

Author's Note

Been a while since I've been able to write poetry I actually liked... though the ending is a bit rough.

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

Great core of a poem which with a little editing could be much more impactful and effective Centi. For instance this -
"You know what, it's all because of you." would be more poetic (and therefore more appealing) as "And...it's all because of you."

And the repeat of similar sentiments such as 'burn and burning in close proximity renders them both less impactful, to me.

Good vent overall though.
:)

[barleygirl]

You've done a good job spewing some of the venomous things we often feel after a bad relationship! Good use of analogy: "I keep feeling this rope pulling tighter & tighter around my heart" . . . Very creatively crafted: "you place lies on your tongue as if they were the air you breathe" (I think you mean the verb form "breathe" with an "e" on the end). All in all, I don't believe in blaming another person becuz all relationship woes take two to get tangled up. But it's authentic, becuz that's how many people feel.

[T.S. Sky]

This is really nice and detailed. I like it.

[Sammie Sanchez]

well done, well done. i like the whole god complex aura going on. nice piece

[Einstein Noodle]

i think your speaker has successfully gotten a lot off his/her chest .. stinging truth telling ....hope the dirty bird gets the message not the worm ;)
E.