Deep Down Inside

Anyone who has experienced depression may be able to relate

Deep down inside, it burns down deep within.

Tear that, my heart; tear all, my weary soul

Still banned from light, consumed by numbing sin

And naught can fill that void; that empty hole

No gold, no fame, nor songs nor stories mend

This sickness brings each day, a wave of pain

Recounting lacks in life, my faults, no end

And trapped still more, by shadows past, in chains.

They hold me now, and nothing breaks the cold;

The downward fall, the ice that hides away

The better self, still shunned til Night grows old

As day returns…but Life’s in disarray…

This single spot of Hell, from all, I hide,

But still, the pain is real down deep inside.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good description of depression. Depression is the blind killer. Can kill hope and dreams of someone without the people near knowing.
"No gold, no fame, nor songs nor stories mend
This sickness brings each day, a wave of pain
Recounting lacks in life, my faults, no end"
The above lines can be true. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mazie]

Thanks :) and yea, I agree, it is a blind killer...very insightful,thanks for reviewing :)

[Chase]

Dear Mel, your affliction is a shared Hell that many have. If all of us are in fact in Hell, should we not get together? A party of sorts is up for grabs if only we were to stand through our Hell and find that hand awaiting something to grasp.. im going to have to write a poem about this now XD Thanks Mel. ANYWAYS! Sorry, my mind is a whirring machine with infinite belts that zip around as if they've no intention of ever stopping. Your piece is an accurate count of depression. Ive found that my own revelation from depression to be, don't allow yourself to dwell on what was or what might be. The past is depression, the future is anxiety. Shall we not live today, now, in this very breath? Would it be so wrong to take this breath and do with it what you want with no regard for what the next may bring? I'm loving your words. Don't you dare stop writing :)

[jennifer little]

i enjoyed reading this poem kind of reminds me of me a little bit in some ways, its a great write ... awsome job keep up the amazing work

[Mazie]

thank you again for your wonderful feed back ^^

[Wórdsmíth]

"As day returns…but Life’s in disarray…" This line`s very beautiful as same as the glamour you`ve got by the hands of God.

There`re too many points that I co-relate with the wicked world--A world where only the pain comes from others. People`ve lost their dignity for everything, no matter what. They`ve become the addicted souls around the world; don`t even know the value of hearts; have kicked out the tears, emotions and opportunities but, with time.. everything gets cooled down because, every day`s new. I happen to know that with time.. even with "seconds" .. the pain can be turned to "happiness" if the heart holds an "attitude" for peace; for some respect to oneself. Very creative write as always. You always put your emotions in your write and even that`s why I love reading your beautiful stuffs which`re themselves full of your own incense. Keep writing! ;)

[Mazie]

Thanks John ^_^ I appreciate your insights :) It is true, some dark things cab turn into good things

[Gregory Joseph DeMartin..]

Oh my, I love your rhyming. EXCELLENT form. Please keep writing like that whenever you find the inspiration. I just don't know what else to say except: 'Wow.'

[Mazie]

Thank you very much ^_^ I am so happy you liked it :)

[George Peck]

another one that I love, description, the feeling, I love it, as always you never disappoint.

[Mazie]

thank you very much ^_^and I am sorry I am taking so long for reviews, I am into my final year of university and the beginning of midterms lol

[George Peck]

Don't worry I understand. I'm in college right now and today is the first day I got no homework. Take your time with any reviews I'm not in a rush.

[Swaroop Manikandan]

This again... reminds me of the days that seems to have passed a long while ago... still...