What stood out the most to me was the "may be".
That line was special because you didn't simply write "maybe". You spaced it out.
"May" you used as an expression of wish.
"Be" you used in expression to exist.
That was amazing. I have to admit.
Sometime the little things stand out the most. Brilliant work. :}
Emily is one of the poets I often look at, simply because she writes very well. And it was clever of me to look at this, a fine poem. I really like off-kilter, and starshine heat is great, a seeming contradiction, but the more you look at this line the more you realise it fits exactly.Excellent.
Beautiful and simple. Extremely well written. I enjoyed the way you closed the poem and left with a hopeful heart. Kudos on a great read, Emily!
Best,
Kara M.
two possibilities occur to me on reading this. one, as the old saying goes, wishing makes it true. the mere belief of someone that you are better than you think you are inspires you to be better. the other possibility is that you are truly much better than you think you are. i have a feeling that is the case. fly.
That sounds a little like a nightingale with a wounded spirit. I think the idea of being stronger than you are due to words is quite a good thought. It is amazing how certain things lift us up.
to the Lost Boys
A Poem by Emily Burns
I am no Wendy;
but my voice brings you back to me.
And you sit around my feet,
anxious for a story
or a kiss.
Listening to my words
spinning a.. more..