Taming the clouds of lonesomeness

Taming the clouds of lonesomeness

A Poem by Relic

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When I'd found 
the warmth of your waist replaced
            by sunrise ribbons
                                      on the bed, 

I felt no more alive 
              than cut grass 
                       pushed aside 
                                          by daisies....

My color 
      had drained,
stormy rains of worry 
                 fell untamed.

But for you 
      I'd rope the moon,
             and lasso long lost sunsets.

I'd break the clouds
              of loneliness 
                      to saddle
                                   joyful bliss.

Content to know 
        I'd tied the reins
              of love around your heart.

Willing to ride
             the extra mile
                          it takes
                                 to get you home. 

© 2017 Relic



Author's Note

 Relic
Inspired by the little picture. (you can click on it).

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yes to have that someone special is precious while loneliness tears one apart.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

It does....thanks. :)
Beautiful
And everyone wishes for someone to feel that way for them.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

I'm sure they do. Thanks.
wow...if my boyfriend would make me a poem as beautiful as this, i would marry him immediately.haha! it's just so romantic.


Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you. :)
Fantastic job, I love the symbolism and description, the poem has such an effortless and breathtaking flow, it is wonderful.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

I appreciate your thought Katerina, thank you. :)
This is WOW II. Your lines dream of a romance with the soul. Oh what a tickle!

regards,
al

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you. :)
Wow, this is stunning, the effortless flow of emotion and heartfelt sentiments are really emotively woven...the longing and yearning and emptiness are palpable and the beauty shining through the in-betweens is far reaching...wonderful piece!

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank very much Poppy. :)
If I were seeking to woo a woman's heart, this is a poem that I would sure as hell recite to her beneath the full moon, having memorized each line in anticipation of melting her heart ... Beautifully done ...

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

You're so kind, thank you Marvin.
How wonderful to ignore the unwanted heartaches and to replace them with the promise of love without limits.

I really enjoyed this write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much.
(applauds) This poem is beautiful!!! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much. :)
Raven Moonchild

1 Year Ago

No,thank you for sharing your poetic mind with unworthy eyes,my friend. :)
Breathtaking. Though I find your use of idented lines a bit redundant, I think the overall stylistic choices, with the punctuation and stanza-length consistent throughout, fit the nuances of the poem. I also like how the metaphors are elegant and a bit over-the-top without making the speaker sound overly dramatic. There's a strong atmosphere of longing and lonliness conveyed in the first stanza that seamlessly progresses throughout. The "waist replaced by sunrise ribbons" description, for both its euphonic sound and uniqueness, was my favorite. Excellent work.

- William Liston

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you William. The indents are just something different for a change.

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