Treachery

The earth shivered with dread and despair 

For it can do nothing but witness the treachery 

Of the dark loathing and ravening night 

When her body was ruthlessly dragged to the graveyard!

Author's Note

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Reviews

[DirectTangent]

Wow.
It speaks to me of an evil befalling an innocence. It feels abrupt, callous, physical, brutal.
"Dark, loathing, ravening night" - vivid imagery.
The brevity of your piece leaves me as the reader in a sudden state of shock, as if I just witnessed an unspeakable horror from which I permanently will be contaminated and from which I will have no hope of recovering.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much! This is the best compliment this poem has been adorned with, till now.
Glad it can have such an effect!

[Valentine]

Just a bit morbid and much left unsaid. Valentine

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you your honest review, Valentine.
Words just came, never made a clear image to me as well but just ended badly. N yes morbidly..

[Chirag Kumar]

The last line sent shivers across my body. Haunting, fierce and powerful write. 100/100

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you! :)

[wordman]

a dark write,tabu subject of sorts,you did a wonderful job on it !

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you! :)

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

such darkness brimmed with light, I adore this piece it stands alone strong and unapologetic!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for the kind comment. Glad you liked it.

[Cody]

Only for likes and I was absolutely dragged into this potent vortex of necrophilia.
100/100

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, Cody.

[Richard🖌]

Jyoti,
You've truly captivated my imagination in this darkly-foreboding Free Verse composition, and I like the captivating way your mind works as it creates the scene with your well-chosen picture, how it is set with her still in her nightie, sitting on the edge of her bed by the window, the curtain pulled slightly aside looking silently out at … at what? Did she see something that might have warned her, or only the beauty of the day, leaving her totally unaware of what would take place under the cover of night? OOooo!

The mystery deepens as the earth metaphorically shiverrrs, while dread and despair overtake her senses, and there is none to see or help her through this evil taking place in the night … the tragedy and fear she would undergo during her foul ordeal by her assailant, and to add injustice to injustice, afterward, he dragged her off and threw her in a lonely, unmarked grave to spend a dark and sad eternity.

Yowza! What a chiller!!! Even Poe would be envious of this fatal mini-drama!
Super, well-rendered suspense, Jyoti, left to your readers' own devices! You certainly inspired me, how did I do?

Thanks for the fun, and the chills! 〜 Richard

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much for your insightful review.
Glad it could have that kinda effect.

[Richard🖌]

You are welcome.

[terry smith]

Poe worthy! :)...do more of these!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you!

[Sindu]

Ah! Now, that's just sweet! Firing imagery. Loved this one.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much, Sindu for reading this and leaving this kind comment.

[Gaurav Bhattacharya]

Really amazing , short but piercing through heart

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you. Glad it could have that kind of effect.

[An owl on the moon]

This is such a fierce, gripping piece, flooded with dark imagery and haunting emotion. Powerfully voiced!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much!