Her

That day she witnessed the invisible; 

Of it she spoke with her lips sealed.  

Many ignorant heard her voice; 

Just to let it fade in silence, 

 While she kept on screaming. 

 -jyoti_ablaze

Reviews

[mou]

silence has the loudness and just another silent moment is needed to hear it
very impressive.. love the work !!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Mou! Silence speaks volumes.

[firabelle]

'about which she spoke with her lips sealed'... Whoa! The 'invisible', etc, have a bit of a wonderfully haunting effect on this piece. She's screaming, but she's not screaming physically, and we suddenly, (or I thought), knew that it was her expression. I loved that you didn't make this poem too long- you packed what you needed in five intense lines. That's all you needed, and that's all you took. It really bothers me when poets try to make their poems longer than necessary; please make sure you never, ever do this! It's like you have to wade through all of the unnecessary junk to get to the good stuff. Really nice job here!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Dear Firabelle,
Glad to have your refreshing review. And don't worry, I am not good at elaborating stuff, so I will be done in whatever it needs, not a word more.
Thank you.
Jyoti

[Einstein Noodle]

good stuff says i!! one never knows ... how someone next to us (friend or stranger) may be screaming inside ..all it takes is a little time to offer a smile, hello, or how's it going for you to open up a whole life to a listening ear ..great poem ..well stated ..creative and precise says i! ;)
E.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you E! Loved having your review!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Silence needs words, darkness needs sight. You need to say it all.
Wonderful and deep words in a few lines.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Well said..
Thank you for the kind comment.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Welcome :)

[Stan Lee]

Many people will choose to remain blissfully ignorant. You've written a deep and meaningful poem Jyoti which succinctly encapsulates that natural inclination.
Well done Jyoti. Keep smiling. :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Andrea! And I am happy! :D
Glad to see you.

[Emily]

Lovely poem!
Keep it up!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Emily!

[Ellen Kolman]

Nothing is worse than screaming at the top of your "voice" in a crowded room and no one even looks up.........excellent heartwrenching poem

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Ellen!

[Dushyant Thadani]

5 lines of deep impact. It's beautiful and frankly broke my heart. Great write

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you. Truth is often painful.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Cryptic?? Poetic??

One person asked, "what defines poetry?"
Another answered, "I'ts attempt to define."

This is beautiful poetry!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Cyprian! Glad you liked it.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome Jyoti!

[Amy R]

This little piece holds so much meaning,
amazing write.
keep it up!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Amy!