BattleField

The battle rages on from the inside.

The battle rages on and on

As my eyes see no dawn

All they see are blood cut and tears

My hands are shaking in the thought of fear

I can only wonder how I got here

For my mind is at a haze 

And I feel like I'm lost nowadays

This battle is one of a kind

For it's all in my mind

Author's Note

I wrote this because we all have times were we're in a dark spot in our minds and we can't get out.

Reviews

[Rachel McLean]

I liked this idea of a 'battlefield' inside someones mind. I also enjoyed the simple rhyming and that it didn't seem too forced. Judging from the rest of the line, I think that in the 3rd line it's supposed to be 'cuts', since you used 'tears', which is plural. If I'm mistaken then sorry 'bout that. An excellent piece overall. Keep up the good work!

[Imperfection2aT]

I'm loving the feeling of this poem. The subject of internal struggle is really relatable, and I think you've written it out here really well. Great job!

[J. Espedal]

I love the impact of the last sentence when we realize it is a battle of the soul, not an actual battlefield. Very good poem.

[Insight "MH"]

A battle between feelings in the field of consciousness. A wonderful write, keep up the good work.

[Jayne Doe]

Wow exquisite writing. I enjoyed the last two lines the most, they really tied the whole piece together.

[Joseph Tafoya]

I really like the flow and how the poem ended this is done very well and is amazing work I love it a lot

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good description of the struggle in the mind. I liked how you led to the very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Delmar Cooper]

There is a theory that it is all in your mind. That if your mind were to shut off everything would end , all the lights go out. Probably not. It is more probable that the mind is the thing that creates, not the world, but a vision of the world. The world is always in conflict, so why not the mind?

[Kittyskittles]

Wow that's deep but I see what your saying :). Very nice. The mind is deep.

[Terry O'Leary]

Yeah... sometimes it gets kinda tough...
But then, sometimes we can crawl bak up and out into the light...
Good poem!

[Kittyskittles]

True. We just have to keep going but thank you.

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the mind can be a haven for great battles...you write something very relatable...well-done

[Kittyskittles]

Thank you for your kind words