I made a wish

I made a wish among the almond trees,

As the blossoms began to fall,

The wish was borne unto the breeze,

The universe heard the wind’s call.

Suspended between language and the world,

The wish tossed and turned on the breeze,

Until one day the wind subdued,

Finding a man praying on his knees.

The wish had now found someone

Filling their whole being with love,

On that day he left his country,

In search of a sign from above.

Like the wish he travelled near and far,

Until he reached at last my home town,

Exhausted now from his travels,

He wanted at last to lay his head down.

He came to me upon that night,

As I watched my Father’s motel,

Scratching the glass of our dreams,

Violets blossomed as clear as a bell.

Within the droplets of a lilac twilight,

We both heard the church bells ring

Our wishes had now been  granted

Our tender hearts, began to sing.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a magical journey in a poem! I love it! I felt my emotions going every which way. There are some areas where you don’t draw the picture clearly, but in the end we can see where this is all headed & how it got there. I like it when a story is written with some open space for interpretation. I love the way you use flowery imagery at the end to suggest what’s blooming between them. This is a nicely hopeful poem in a sad & jaded world (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Madeira]

Awwww thank you once again so much Margie, I really appreciate the reviews (hugs)

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was a lovely write with so much sweet and beautiful imagery. It's very soft and romantic. I enjoyed the peaceful feeling I had while reading it.

[Madeira]

Thank you once again Fabian, I am so pleased that you like this

[Chris Shaw]

I made a wish among the almond trees,
As the blossoms began to fall

A beautiful way to hook the reader in, and your story line is delightful. Wonderful for wishes to come true.
nicely composed and enjoyable to read.

Thank you

Chris

[Madeira]

Thank you Chris for your kind review, really appreciate it

[Wild Rose]

Now I have read it a few times (I am a bit slow) and got into your journey

I was intrigued [Good job I have spell checker]
Please you blossomed clear as a violet
I love to hear church bells ring > prefer the earth to move
then sleep the sleep of the contented

[Madeira]

Many thanks for taking the time to read

[Richard🖌]

Hi again, Madeira,
Oh, I really relish this sweetly romantic tale in the most deeply abiding ways.
These lines are my favorite, poetically speaking:

"Suspended between language and the world,
The wish tossed and turned on the breeze,"

With a wee touch here and there on syntax and flow, maybe separate the verses, this can easily be the virtual masterpiece it deserves to be.
Whatever, I love it to pieces … big hug of thanks! ⁓ Richard : )