Seashell on the ground

SEASHELL ON THE GROUND 

Like a seashell I remain on the ground,

Some notice and pick the best ones,

While some are left around.

I feel I am the left one which no one cares about,

I have been picked once,

But thrown back to the ground.

I feel I am the worst surrounded by the best,

Like a seashell which is lying on the beach,

I feel so alone untouched and beyond one's reach.

I still feel lonely when I have everyone around,

I am diving deep in my agony,

I am waiting to be found.

Care for me before I am buried in the ground,

Otherwise I would be merely lying,

Like a seashell on the ground.

Reviews

[iamshadowine]

A really very creative plot to write on. I wonder what made you think of it. I like how you've compared the feel of getting attention to a seashell :)

"Like a seashell I remain on the ground,
Some notice and pick the best ones,
While some are left around."

My favorite lines from this poem

[Najam Us Saher]

I wrote this for a contest Like a seashell was the line given. I am grateful to Michael S for creating that contest only because of that I was able to write this. I am feeling very happy to know that you liked it. Thank you so much :)

[R.J Calzonetti (Siniste..]

The poem tell me you seem to be calling out for attention and respect. I believe everyone in life does the same. Everyone deserves to be noticed, cared for, and respected. I love the way you rhymed it!

[Najam Us Saher]

Yes I agree with you. Everyone needs a little attention and concern just to make them feel that they are not being abandoned and disliked. Thank you so much :)

[Surya]

Sad, emotical, yet a beautiful piece.
Thank you for sharing..

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for reading :) keep reading my work whenever you like.

[Surya]

You are welcome, and ofcourse I will.

[Danie]

Wow such a lovely piece! I love how you have captured perfectly what it feels like to be lonely and unworthy. It also made me feel sad for shells as well that aren't as pretty as the rest. Impressive read 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much :) I feel widely elated to know that you liked it.

[Njeri Brooks]

This was composed of two very interesting concepts: loneliness and self-worth.

These two concepts are very versatile because they can be in cooperated into a story in so many different ways. Overall, you REALLY hit the mark with both concepts because when people feel lonely, they also feel a bit inadequate.

~~N. Brooks

[Najam Us Saher]

Yes you are right. Thank you so much I am glad that you liked it ☺

[Sonakshi Arora]

My mom absolutely adores your writing. We both loved the rhyme scheme of this poem . Lovely!

[Najam Us Saher]

It's a pleasure to hear that. Convey my regards to her :) Thank you so much for your kind words.

[Lady Pearl]

I love this. With valentines coming up a lot of my friends feel this way too. as i was reading this i imagined being a beautiful seashell picked up to be loved and when i got thrown back to the ground it's because the person holding me cracked my shell and broke me in half erasing my beauty. and the more I get picked up the uglier i become. And now I have become this person that is too difficult to be loved that I'd never get picked up again.
Amazing poem really love this.

[Najam Us Saher]

I feel widely elated. Thank you so much :) I am glad that you were able to relate with it.

[zaisham9393]

Awesome!Thank you for sharing !

[Najam Us Saher]

My pleasure. I am glad that you liked it. Thank you for reading. :)

[Jenny]

BEAUTIFUL! and such a fitting analogy!

Thank you so much for sharing
J

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you I am glad that you liked it :)

[Jenny]

anytime :)

[Tony Jordan]

Simplicity seems to be the way to go these days and you are so simple, in your words. I love it, it's awesome. Go on Canada !!
:D

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much :) I feel happy to know that you liked it.

[Tony Jordan]

Really - how happy ? lol