A Story by Neetha

Bloody smart...


“Be smart!”

He warned. As if that was necessary.

“I will be”

I replied back defiantly.

As I set out on my mission, I felt a whole new level of energy building up inside me.

I felt excited and thrilled to the core.

Even though it’s my first attempt, I knew I would be successful.

Straight and hard.

Meanwhile, I had already spotted my target.

He was lost in his own world, or rather, sunk in a muddle of self-induced problems.

“Pathetic humans!” I smirked.

I quickened my pace and got along with him.

He was flummoxed by my presence.

The red lips and dark eyes had cast its spell.

But soon enough, his face contorted and his eyes grew wide from fear.

A sly smile spread across my face.

As I pulled him closer and my fangs sank into his fleshy human neck, I felt a wave of satisfaction roaring inside me.

Its game-time…

© 2017 Neetha

Author's Note

Be free to criticise me.
This is my first attempt writing from a villainous perspective.
Your reviews would be of great help:)

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Critique: (Its game-time…) It's - the possessive pronoun "Its" should be a contraction instead

Review: This is a great writing exercise it allowed you to express your sensitivities allowing them to deceive your readers from the true nature of your story. This gave your ending a chilling impact with the sinking of the fangs, Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

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1 Year Ago

Thank you so much Bear:)
Your reviews are always helpful and great:)


a sweet and sexy vampire,the only way to be bitten

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1 Year Ago

Thank you Wordman!

1 Year Ago

my pleasure
great attempt and keep writing like this again.

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1 Year Ago

Thank you so much Abraham:)
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Wicked! Great descriptions and a cool storyline. Enjoyed!

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1 Year Ago

I am glad to know that Zoe!:)
This is nicely written. Descriptive evil story. Well done.

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1 Year Ago

Always a pleasure Najam:)

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14 Reviews
Added on July 30, 2017
Last Updated on July 30, 2017
Tags: Blood, Smart



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