Take Note of This Body

Take Note of This Body

A Poem by Neville Pettitt



Take note of the body

Which lies beside you

Perfectly still

But by no means innocent

 

It is there you will find

A man who dreams

And in the midst of things

He shall dream

 

The water wheel is mended

The children’s bellies full

There is a stranger in the cornfield

Limping home from war

 


© 2017 Neville Pettitt



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He dreams....and that says so much. We all have our dreams and often the one lying right beside us is unaware of them. Should we share them? Perhaps some things are better left un-shared. Dream on, Neville...it is the stuff good poetry is made of. Lydi**

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

3 Weeks Ago

You are far too kind, but I Like it. Thank you my friend...N



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Day Dreaming of days long past, and hopefully to come.

Great Read

Matthew

Posted 6 Days Ago


Neville Pettitt

6 Days Ago

Many thank you's indeed Matthew, cheers......N
Matthew Kult

6 Days Ago

You are welcome

Matthew
There's a lot going on in this poem.
Soldiers at war, dream of home life.
But the actual reality of coming home can bring its own demons.
Lying next to a love one, means safety. But also guilt for surviving.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Neville Pettitt

2 Weeks Ago

It can indeed
He dreams....and that says so much. We all have our dreams and often the one lying right beside us is unaware of them. Should we share them? Perhaps some things are better left un-shared. Dream on, Neville...it is the stuff good poetry is made of. Lydi**

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

3 Weeks Ago

You are far too kind, but I Like it. Thank you my friend...N
The complexities of a man, never to be underestimated...the trains of thought traveling on both confluent and divergent tracks, waking and sleeping. Love the tenderness and strength in your words, the peace and the power. Great poem!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

3 Weeks Ago

I am both honoured & humbled by your kind words Annette, many thanks indeed....Neville
Annette Pisano Higley

3 Weeks Ago

You are most deservedly welcome my friend!
Stranger in the cornfield limping home........shattered the warm image I was holding till then, a powerful poem!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Neville Pettitt

3 Weeks Ago

Many thanks for the visit
Mrudula Rani

3 Weeks Ago

It's my pleasure.
I'm with bg on the lay's outputting that to one side, I found this quite compelling. I can't pin it down, but there's something in how you've phrased things, the short almost staccato statements, that lends impact and a kind of gravity. And like bg I'm struggling to understand it, but that doesn't stop me enjoying its sounds and rhythms.

BRs Nigel

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Nigel Newman

3 Weeks Ago

... but putting that to one side ...
Neville Pettitt

3 Weeks Ago

Maybe the pair of you are right on the lays v lies front, thank you for considering these words of m.. read more
A circle of thinking thoughts.. a buzzyness of mind whilst lying by someone you love, want, perhaps!?

Strange it is how the mind curves when it should be focussing! Intriguing however. Seems you've gone back in time.. perhaps. A flight of fancy in every sense. Perhaps?!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

1 Month Ago

Thank you emmajoy, I appreciate our consideration of these words of mine & welcome the comments you .. read more
There is a stranger in the cornfield
Limping home from war

Reminds me of Gone With The Wind and happy endings. The second verse evokes lovely, wholesome images.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Neville Pettitt

1 Month Ago

Bless ya Divya................N
Definitely unlike anything else I've read! Unusual observations & tons of originality. Not sure what it means, but I always like fresh, thought-provoking ideas *wink! wink!* I'm thinking "lay's" should be "lies" . . . (one of those quirky rules that I'm never sure I've got right!?!?!) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

1 Month Ago

Very much muchly appreciated Margie, you may be right. I'm gonna dwell on that very issue for a whil.. read more

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