Take Note of This Body

Take note of the body

Which lies beside you

Perfectly still

But by no means innocent

 

It is there you will find

A man who dreams

And in the midst of things

He shall dream

 

The water wheel is mended

The children’s bellies full

There is a stranger in the cornfield

Limping home from war

 

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

He dreams....and that says so much. We all have our dreams and often the one lying right beside us is unaware of them. Should we share them? Perhaps some things are better left un-shared. Dream on, Neville...it is the stuff good poetry is made of. Lydi**

[Neville]

You are far too kind, but I Like it. Thank you my friend...N

[Matthew Kult]

Day Dreaming of days long past, and hopefully to come.

Great Read

Matthew

[Neville]

Many thank you's indeed Matthew, cheers......N

[Matthew Kult]

You are welcome

Matthew

[Paul Bell]

There's a lot going on in this poem.
Soldiers at war, dream of home life.
But the actual reality of coming home can bring its own demons.
Lying next to a love one, means safety. But also guilt for surviving.

[Neville]

It can indeed

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

The complexities of a man, never to be underestimated...the trains of thought traveling on both confluent and divergent tracks, waking and sleeping. Love the tenderness and strength in your words, the peace and the power. Great poem!

[Neville]

I am both honoured & humbled by your kind words Annette, many thanks indeed....Neville

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

You are most deservedly welcome my friend!

[Mrudula Rani]

Stranger in the cornfield limping home........shattered the warm image I was holding till then, a powerful poem!

[Neville]

Many thanks for the visit

[Mrudula Rani]

It's my pleasure.

[Nigel Newman]

I'm with bg on the lay's outputting that to one side, I found this quite compelling. I can't pin it down, but there's something in how you've phrased things, the short almost staccato statements, that lends impact and a kind of gravity. And like bg I'm struggling to understand it, but that doesn't stop me enjoying its sounds and rhythms.

BRs Nigel

[Nigel Newman]

... but putting that to one side ...

[Neville]

Maybe the pair of you are right on the lays v lies front, thank you for considering these words of mine, much appreciated....Neville

[emmajoy]

A circle of thinking thoughts.. a buzzyness of mind whilst lying by someone you love, want, perhaps!?

Strange it is how the mind curves when it should be focussing! Intriguing however. Seems you've gone back in time.. perhaps. A flight of fancy in every sense. Perhaps?!

[Neville]

Thank you emmajoy, I appreciate our consideration of these words of mine & welcome the comments you have left behind......N

[DIVYA]

There is a stranger in the cornfield
Limping home from war

Reminds me of Gone With The Wind and happy endings. The second verse evokes lovely, wholesome images.

[Neville]

Bless ya Divya................N

[barleygirl]

Definitely unlike anything else I've read! Unusual observations & tons of originality. Not sure what it means, but I always like fresh, thought-provoking ideas *wink! wink!* I'm thinking "lay's" should be "lies" . . . (one of those quirky rules that I'm never sure I've got right!?!?!) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

Very much muchly appreciated Margie, you may be right. I'm gonna dwell on that very issue for a while now. Virtual hugs on their way...N