A honey bee hovers above the chrysanthemums I sit mesmerized by the sight and sound, the rapid movement of its wings and the humming of its buzz. I do this from time to time then ask myself why? A voice soon echoes in my head, it's just because, just because
Some nights I stare at your picture on the wall memorizing the lines of your face thinking of our life together, a life that never was. I find myself doing this now and then and ask myself why? A voice then echoes in my head, it was almost love, almost love
The feelings I have for you are a mystery to me I am baffled by the depth and longing, whenever I read a poem you wrote or gaze at the stars above. I do this more often than you know, then ask myself why? A voice soon whispers within my soul, it was only love, only love.....
I love the flow and consistency of your lovely poem, Dara. Sometimes we're just about there, but not quite. We grasp at love, but our grasp in not quite tight enough, which doesn't mean you can't dream about it.
Very thoughtful piece, I love it!!!
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thank you so much! It is not a wonder that love is compared to the illusiveness of a butterfly. It m.. read moreThank you so much! It is not a wonder that love is compared to the illusiveness of a butterfly. It may seem within our reach but sometimes has a habit of disappearing. So good of you to stop by. I hope all Is well with you and yours. :-)))
As a writer who loves rhyme & rhythm & pattern, I love how there's a parallel construction to your verses & how there's a recurrence of word sounds that feel like an echo, along with the fading-out repetition of each last line. Normally I don't get into poems where someone is pining for someone else, as it feels too futile for me to contemplate. But the way you describe this, you evoke a more sympathetic response in me . . . as if you're just saying this narrator is only human & she's not a fool pining for someone, but rather a simple human haunted by feelings beyond his/her control. We've all had such futile echoes of some past love, even if we choose to ignore them! This poem makes me feel more understanding toward those who pine (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thank you Margie! I am so pleased that you enjoyed my attempt at rhythm and rhyming as well as under.. read moreThank you Margie! I am so pleased that you enjoyed my attempt at rhythm and rhyming as well as understanding the essence of this poem. I often reflect on such things when sitting in quiet natural surroundings without investing too much emotion. Love comes and sometimes goes. I guess that is just the way of life..... Great to see you. :-))) Take care!
oh Dara! how beautifully sad :((((((((( well done! so easy to sense the flow .. i felt tight with your speaker .. one in the same experience ... just different people ;) this is just beautiful! what can i say more??? thanks for sharing this heartfelt, well constructed moment of recollections .. and that closing line is breathtaking for me .. and V1 L8 "just because....." YES! we try so hard to put things in between pages ... seal them up in sense ... and life over and over again tries to teach us something quite different .. love the moment created in V1 ...the whole thing really sets me up for the turn and contrast in closing .. nice nice nice one Dara ..glad i came checking up on you as its been a while ... and tho i didn't find something new i found this gem! peace and joy my friend!
E.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Reading your review just gave me the jump start I needed to think about writing again. It has been a.. read moreReading your review just gave me the jump start I needed to think about writing again. It has been a dry spell for me for some reason and now I feel a renewed sense of putting 'pen to paper' or in a more modern sense, finger tips to the keyboard. I am so happy you enjoyed this whimsical write and could relate. Perhaps getting older has something to do with it too. I have a tendency to get sentimental these days. What a joy to read your words and the emotion behind them. All my best to you dear friend!
'.. A voice soon echoes in my head, ~ it's just because, just because.. ' It's how it is.
Love seems to find a way of showing both tragedy and comedy! The sadness of what might have been, the pleasure of contemplation. Strange how the Without beckons so loudly, yet - the glass could shatter and our emotions cut to pieces. Your writing really hints/nudges with great dexterity, just enough to make the reader think... and think...
How subtle you are!
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Hello Emma! Thank you for your insightful, uplifting words. It is always such a pleasure to read you.. read moreHello Emma! Thank you for your insightful, uplifting words. It is always such a pleasure to read you and often inspires me to keep plugging along. Loving and/or the loss of inspires writing for those very reasons you mentioned above. Both to celebrate and commiserate.... Take care friend!
5 Years Ago
And you take care too.. As a young friend recently told me: Smile day and night, give the gremmerli.. read moreAnd you take care too.. As a young friend recently told me: Smile day and night, give the gremmerlins (!) a fright. :)
This is really a really moving piece. As it turns into a broken hearted memory, it sheds somewhat of a relief of ahhhhh it's only love, that explains it. As always you've clearly put emotions into words seamlessly. I loved it.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Your reviews always bring a smile to my face, Bill. What a lovely way of putting it. When it comes t.. read moreYour reviews always bring a smile to my face, Bill. What a lovely way of putting it. When it comes to love, the heart rules therefore reason often goes out the door. So great to see you here!
Unrequited love sucks, it is so painful and all you are left with are memories. Some good, but then the most recent ones are raw. Apart from the memories you are also left with a lot of unanswered questions. Your poem poignant, beautifully written Dara.
Chris
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Thank you so much Christine. Your words are both very wise and true. We can only hope the good memor.. read moreThank you so much Christine. Your words are both very wise and true. We can only hope the good memories outweigh the bad.
I believe the heart has a mind of its own. It defies logic as we know it, so the best thing to do is simply ride it out. So much word for thought here, Dara. Thank you for allowing me to see... I'm not alone!
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Yes, the heart certainly does and sometimes makes for a "lonely hunter", those words taken from one .. read moreYes, the heart certainly does and sometimes makes for a "lonely hunter", those words taken from one of my favorite movies staring Alan Arkin. But it seems we can be certain that we are not alone when it comes to matters of the heart. Thank you for your thoughtful words!
I am a retired teacher who has just recently discovered the joy of writing poetry. Formerly known as Passion Flower, I decided to publish using my own name. My poetry is simple and from the heart whi.. more..