A Lonely Street

It's just an imagination.

A lass rambling alone in  a street,

Hedged by murky street lights.

Her gloomy eyes gazed at

Those murky street lights

All of a sudden, a little girl rushed

And hold her from the back.

The lassie looked  back,

but Alas! None was there.

She remembers her little sister,

Who is no more with  her.

She recalls her deep sick  memories

Memories as  deep as  a well.

 She gained pain again

with tears bursting her eyes

and she walked ahead in lonely street.

Author's Note

Another try by me and my little cute, cousin, Madhu.
Hope you like it.
Thank u, Surya.

Reviews

[Mr.Writer]

A heart breaking, emotional masterpiece!
Such deep thoughts, and feelings as she walks the lonely street...
Well done, keep it up Priyanshi!

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much, Mr Writer...I'm glad that you liked the poem...thanks once again.

[Mr.Writer]

No problem! :)

[Ethan]

Great job, but street and deep become redundant very quickly. Try to use different words to say the same thing. Other than that, nicely done.

[Priyanshi]

Okay, friend , next time i shall keep it in mind. thank you so much.

[Sofia]

That sister part is emotional and touching. I loved this a lot. Thanks for sharing such an amazing and brilliant piece. Would love to read more from you :)

[Priyanshi]

Thank you, dear, so so much..Yeah. you'll read some more next time.thanks .

[Sofia]

You're most welcome :)

[pragya gaur]

Priyanshi ji I agree with Najam ji there is a depth in your words.... Brought a few tears in my eyes...Great work

[Priyanshi]

I'm sorry for that, dear...and thanks a lot , for the kind review and visit.

[Najam Us Saher]

There is so much depth in your words. I liked the description here it was very effective.

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much for the appreciating review and visit. I'm glad you liked it.

[Najam Us Saher]

You are welcome friend ☺

[Farhan Shaikh]

So much pain..amazing work Priyanshi, i really liked it

[Priyanshi]

Thank you, so much, Farhan, I'm glad that you liked it.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Haunting and melancholy imagery and words. A "lass" walking alone with sad memories as deep as a well" of her sister "who is no more with her". A child touches her- is it her sister's spirit? We wonder...

[Priyanshi]

Yeah, maam it is her sis' spirit....Thank you so much, for your kind review and visit.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is heartbreaking and shows how much pain there can be in this world.

[Priyanshi]

Yeah, friend you are right...
thank you very much for the kind review and visit.

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome

[Surya]

I did liked it...sometimes pain of missing is unbearable....i truly liked it...:)

[Priyanshi]

A special thanks to you, for editing it and for the kind review.Thank u once again, friend.

[Surya]

Always a Pleasure..:)