Leaped in The Dark

Another Broken heart..

Those unspoken words remained covered,

under that long winter night

When eyes spoke everything and heart cried..

When there was three stories 

The reason only one

There was a triangle 

which broke down into several pieces like glass

When two heart beated ..one silently cried

Who knew?She will be the next one to smile?

I was shoved from my place like it's a circle between her and I

She was going to get back the love she owned once upon a time .

And  I was just used,

To satisfy someone's selfish thirst...

I wish I knew what my fault was?

Is it  really stupid to trust someone?

Now I am the only one,lying in the bed of thorns ..where all those fake roses of love

Having an evil laugh!

When I needed my explanations

How amazing!

No one answered

We just remained as known strangers..

I can't say It was a mistake 

When I made it my choice

resulting a ocean of tears & a punched heart..

What else to say?

When I simply leaped in the dark?

Reviews

[Tasfia Islam]

Amazing....really enjoyed it and understood the message hidden behind it....but some of the grammatical errs became really annoying in this wonderful poem like, there is no word like spoked. it will be spoke..... so, if u had avoided these sort of mistakes, it would be a perfect poem... :) keep it up.... well done

[Lenah Mehzabin]

haha right i know "'spoke is already in past tense '' so there is no point that it will be spoked ..thanks for your point out .. It's still under construction ;)

[Arsh]

Leaped in the dark? I love making you leap into the dark not to make you invisible to the world, but to make you alive & allow your heart to please the state of your breathtaking spirit... having my presence around your neck, hand wrapped around your waist, lips upon your forehead & the eyes starring at into the paradise of your flesh (eyes). But.. here, it's not 'bout me, it's 'bout a guy who just left ya alone behind the fake-walls of his love... so, he must find himself into the speck of ashes for leaving a beautiful ReD ones ... feeling like an outcast (so alone in the world).

Ps. Your tears speaking through your words.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you : )) !

[Arsh]

Thank you for what? For reviewing it? Or For winning your heart?

[Lenah Mehzabin]

For winning mah heart ..

[Arsh]

Boom~I'm dead... ain't I? Damnit, of course, I'm.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Boom~ ambulance there no tears ! doctore me will save ya ; )

[Arsh]

And... I'm already a Doctor. Be my breathtaking "Nurse" honey.. and be my remedy. Want you? Of course, you want to. Don`t ya? Of course, you do.. ain't ya?

[Lenah Mehzabin]

I want it ,sure dear ; )

[Confuser]

Wonderful writing; a voice to be heard. I loved it. Keep writing. I can never write poems of love and it is so hard to believe you are 16. Just amazing. Thank you.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

ohW thank you so much ! .it's a great honour .I'm glad that my writing touched u :))

[Confuser]

You're welcome!

[Megan]

Very nice write. I can see how it is relatable to my piece.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you dear :) .. glad u liked it nd ya thats why i said it was relatable :-)

[jemaral]

This piece is easily relatable given that everyone of us has experienced or eventually have to go through the excruciating experience when love dies. This piece is essentially a poetic rendition of this question " After everything do i not at least deserve and explanation ? ". Truly wonderful work reading your work on the subject maks me want to write one of my own... thank you so much for sharing..

[Lenah Mehzabin]

It's really an honour ..thank you so much for your generous coment :) very much appreciated .I'm really glad that you liked it .. :-)

[Melliflower]

Oh my god... this is so relatable and beautifully written! It's so raw and truthful and i love it!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thanks a lot ! i m really glad nd happy dat u liked it :)

[A Scribbler Named Bek]

I really like the last few lines in your first stanza - really nice. It's easy to feel the raw emotions that are flowing from this piece. Great job :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you ! :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

It's based on some true story.. hope you will like it .. :)

[Jennie Baron]

I agree, very nice and very honest in its emotional pain.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you very much ! :)

[vineyard]

Nicely written.:) You expressed emotions so nicely.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you I m glad that u liked it.. ! :)