Suicide is for the Hopeful

Suicide is for the Hopeful

A Poem by Raymond Federle
"

hope creeps in to take me.

"

To you, my aching heart, broken and bewildered.

And you, the sorrowed face, detached and unfamiliar.

For you, inspired aim, so cruel and unforgiving.

I leave you now, in shallow ground, so that you may fade away.


For the silent whisper, wont with rage suppressed.
Then you, withdrawn emotion, so cowardly and crass.
To you, misguided anger, opportune and unexpected
I leave you here, in the midst of nothing, so that you disappear.


For the one faltering step, unreliable and deemed the wicked.
To this unrelenting hindsight, indifferent and unbearable.
For these streaming tears, uninvited, scarring and forever..
I leave you bound, beneath the surface, so that you never appear.


So here you are, this troubled mind, brutal and abrasive.
Along with you, crippling depression, committed and unwavering.
This is all for you, troubled past, so permanent, so wearing.
I leave you all, as good as dead...

so hope creeps in to take me.

© 2014 Raymond Federle


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Raymond Federle

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Wow...this has to be one of the most, powerful, bone-tingling and saddest suicide poems I read. This was masterfully crafted, and the words are flawlessly chosen and tied. It's extremely horrifying that many people come to the point of suicide, but with correct care and hope, depression and suicide rates can drop. Thank you for penning and sharing.

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Raymond Federle

10 Years Ago

I have been luck in my life to have never had to deal with thoughts of suicide. I do struggle with d.. read more



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This was a popular write that I thought I'd dust it off and put it on the table for review again. Re-worked some of the line for form and flow. This was an emotional piece for me as I am sure it was for some reviewers. Thank you ahead of time for you time! :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Whew...such a powerful poem that it's hard to comment. Even the title, "Suicide is for the Hopeful," is immediately grabbing and leaves kind of an imprint on me.

But, as I understand it, this "suicide note" is addressed to the darkest parts of you, gripped by depression and such. And it seems as if you're burying those parts to find freedom.

Whether or not my "interpretation" is accurate, I really appreciate the poem as a whole, and find it very effective on me. It sounds extremely therapeutic. I've struggled at various points in my life with depression and serious emotional troubles. Though we may write about them in very different ways, I feel that poetry is one of the most powerful ways to get through those difficult times. Thank you for sharing this with me and everyone!

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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a very powerful and amazing poem. Bravo! :)

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Just wow.... this was amazing and powerful. You have a way with painting a picture in the mind with your words. xo Winter

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Raymond Federle

10 Years Ago

Thx winter! :)

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Raymond Federle
Raymond Federle

Cumberland, MD



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I've always been a jack of all trades. I've been a poet, author, social commentator, comedian, online gamer, pod cast host, and Youtuber. I've had a class A license to drive semi truck over the road. .. more..

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