In Eternity ⁓  (heart-whispers)

In Eternity ⁓ (heart-whispers)

A Poem by Richard
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In Eternity ~


When above the tall pecans
a pale moon rises high,
cattails bend softly to the breeze
and rushes wave goodbye …

there’s an aching in my heart
that nothing can quite quell …
I wish you’d changed your mind
and stayed a longer spell.

The whippoorwill, she beckons,
a song so sad and blue …
'pon every falling leaf, your voice
is calling for me, too.

The turning of my heart,
each beat a lonely tune,
and I know I’ll never smile again
if You don’t come back soon.

With lowered head I wander …
down paths we strolled before,
and every stone your feet upturned,
remembered all the more.

Amongst the rows of evergreen
we swore our lover’s vows,
and carved our names into the bark
… made love beneath their boughs.

I hope you’re happier than me,
that your new lover treats you sweet;
and, every chance he has, he takes
to make your happiness complete.

In Autumn’s leaves I’ll see your eyes,
golden waves of grain your hair,
in each and every cloud on high …
images of your shape appear.

In every face on every street,
I’ll look to see if it is You,
and with each breath that I take in,
there will be enough for two.

No doubting now, nor can there be;
for, nevermore I’ll be alone.
All through my veins your essence flows,
deep in my core and every bone.

Such blissful comfort sings to me
of Paradise in harmony,
that an angel’s love from up above
lives forever ~ in eternity.



Richard W. Jenkins
©2017



© 2017 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Something from last Autumn the impending Winter chill must have inspired … it may be a bit too long for some.

Helpful, well-intended critique and comments are always welcome …
thank you most warmly and sincerely, for sharing your time with me! : )

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Such a beautiful touching read...really enjoyed :) x

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Lady-Poet! : )

It is my pleasure to serve you for your enjoyment! ⁓ Rich.. read more
I thought this was about the seasons.. but then it was about a love lost.... then Eternity, seems like the person is in heaven ..? Which ever, it is beautiful, and touches this heart...

Jazzy

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear Jasmine!
Yes, I guess it can be a bit confusing how I title my pieces … I .. read more
J. J.  Nightingale

7 Months Ago

Sorry... . it was a wonderful piece..!.... HUGS
It must be lonely where you are. Hardly anyone can dig into your writes and help you improve. Sitting on that mountain of Symbol, Rhyme and Meter must ache Poor Richards Bones. But then again he just sits and negates a poem to take home.

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UPDATE TRY TO FIX>>>>>> Richard, OH MY, , I can't even erase that above, It's just so badly spoken I had to leave it for an example of how far off one can think and write the opposite.
As I was saying below. I NEVER meant what I said. What I meant was your out of our league when it comes to Poetry. You know I have nothing but respect for you and your poetry. You sit on top of the mountain and possess it. You just simply own it all. There is never anything to critique. How do you critique perfection? That is what I meant.. I have been very busy going in many directions but am trying to connect with Writers cafe friends again. I miss you all and have been gone so long. Perhaps My mind is tired? I don't know but, I'm shocked myself at how badly I expressed my thought there. ((((( Hugs)))) to you Always.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Cryingkate

7 Months Ago

Oh Dear, Just re reading that and it sounded terrible.... I didn't mean to at all. I did not express.. read more
J. J.  Nightingale

7 Months Ago

:).....................................
Hey! I wrote a poem like this!!!!! But yours is much better ... real poetry, full of feeling. you are a real master of words. Wonderful!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

8 Months Ago

I appreciate you so very much, M'Lady! : )
There is nothing more inspiring and encouraging a .. read more
Great Aunt Astri

7 Months Ago

Well, I have not posted my poem ... it is still a bit tender. When the winter chill has worn off a b.. read more
Richard

7 Months Ago

Please, do.
"there’s an aching in my heart
that nothing can quite quell …
I wish you’d changed your mind
and stayed a longer spell"...glimps of hope...
And your poem was quite impressive with your words and a good feel to your loved one...:)

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Surya,
It is an honor to receive your choice of verse and meaningful comments!
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Richard

8 Months Ago

Blessings to you! ⁓ Richard
Surya

8 Months Ago

It's my reading and am blessed to have such words...
I have absolutely no desire to give any 'critique' on this Richard! How can one do that when everything about this is awesomely gorgeous with poignant feelings and longing. Bravo!

Helena

Posted 8 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Richard

8 Months Ago

My warmest, most grateful thanks, Helena! : )

Your words leave an inspiring glow! ⁓.. read more
i learned so maNY new words in this poem thanks for using them will try in my new poem

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Writ,
It is always rewarding and inspiring to know one of my efforts has offered a.. read more

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