Inside Strong Walls

Dead leaves and blank pages

hopeful thoughts and empty cages

What is life without the pain

without there is nothing to gain

The hole in the whole 

is like fire to the coal 

blazing and wild 

hurting the child

inside yourself

or stuck on the shelf

that part of us 

thats thrown under the bus

so sacred, so scared

that part thats never shared

We may be broken

but, who is it that has woken

those who are sane

up to the pain 

of the fractured, and captured 

the cursed and the shamed

The rain that falls

inside strong walls 

Or the drought that wails

to which there is no bail

cannot be seen 

by another being

Unless of course

you say, so hoarse

Come see this rain

Come stop the pain

That is of life

The prolonging of the knife

that brings forth a bead

of blood so full of need

 

Reviews

[Confuser]

Sammyrae574: I stopped at the repetion of the slight syllables: so sacred, so scared that part thats never shared: First stanza: loved it; building more with 2: phenomenal work - the hole in the whole: oh my my...I am breathless: let's throw my poetry away!! You are brilliant! Thank you so much. Seriously well done. That is of life
The prolonging of the knife
that brings forth a bead
of blood so full of need: Wow. Bravo!

[Sammyrae574]

Thank you so much for great review! Totally made my day! never throw your poetry away! Its beautiful!!

[Confuser]

You're so welcome Sannyrae574: Please keep writing. Never doubt yourself, & Thank you. Dale

[emipoemi]

Were it not for the possible error in the confusion of Stanza 1 Line 4, this would merit my go-to expression of awe!! Because this is AWE-full!! (Not AWEsome, because it doesn't exude and elicit "some" awe, but dangit, it's FULL of awe!!) I'm stunned at the brilliance of this. The sound work that delves deeply into metaphor, the imagery, the well-strung message - the fabulous flow!! AAAAAAH!! So many juicy lines. But that fourth line of Stanza 1 seems to be missing something.....like a word or some punctuation, because as is, it doesn't seem to make much sense grammatically.

But overall, well freaking done. Much enjoyed!!

[AaronFreitas]

Awesome poem Sammy! I love the darkness and the rhyming in the poem. Very enjoyable read... good job!