Wordplay

Wordplay

A Poem by Sara
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Wordplay

The

black

strokes

so d.e.c.i.s.i.v.e. & ~~swift

-etch- themselves across the page

like ice skaters in a rink(!)

forming images of

sorrowful *beauty*

&

beautiful :( sorrow ):

holding their secretsclose

before an ATOMIC explosion of

c a t h a r s i s.

© 2010 Sara



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... very stark ... very dramatic ... very powerful ... amazing visually ... each and every detail makes this verse more potent ... particularly in the last two lines ... and ... "an ATOMIC explosion of c a t h a r s i s" ... is sheer genius ... a great verse ...

Posted 7 Years Ago


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pretty clever. excellent use of emoticons

Posted 7 Years Ago


I reviewed this poem last night, but then my internet connection went out of wack.

I really enjoyed this poem. I found it to be very creative. I like what you did with it.
It was an interesting read and different and a breath of fresh air, if you will.

My favorite:
secretsclose and c a t h a r s i s

The only thing I didn't understand was
"like ice skaters in a rink(!)"
The whole (!) is what I'm missing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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... very stark ... very dramatic ... very powerful ... amazing visually ... each and every detail makes this verse more potent ... particularly in the last two lines ... and ... "an ATOMIC explosion of c a t h a r s i s" ... is sheer genius ... a great verse ...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a wonderful playground you built here for these words to be free and innocent like children.

Sorrowful beauty. Very nice.
Antonio


Posted 7 Years Ago


This is wonderful!
Your unconventional and radical take on poetry is very well done.

A beautiful piece of modern art.

Posted 7 Years Ago


sara,

simply beautiful. ee cummings would be proud :) not 100% sold on the spacing between lines though, and just one other suggestion since you use so many different keys or symbols on the keyboard; why not think about changing "and" in l4, l9 to "&". just a thought. like your work :)

sincerely,
jr

Posted 7 Years Ago


Wow! I like how many typical rules you break here. Most of the time writers are discourgaed from doing many of the things you do in this poem because it is distracting. Yet you find a unity for all of it. Using different spacing, italics, strike out, etc. are examples. Even the subject matter is one my creative writing professors have told me to avoid: writing about writing. However, you pull this off beautifully. What a great read!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I love poems that play with the structures of words themselves. everyone jokes that ee cummings' shift key broke, but that's not it. it's about

giving
words

the space


to arrange

themselves --

which you have certainly done here. wonderful. i like the ice skaters in a rink with the parenthetical exclamation point best.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Me I like the wordage in its utter simplicity and actually says something
stylized, perky and emotive type Beat deal in a gambit of visual interplay.
Quirky Cool words to play to the fooling ourselves, that meaningful things are
never direct. Well I've designed stuff with the keyboard, it can be entertainment
and occasionally resemble Art. Dynamic opposites, always work or me and
ya, that's word play... cool! Love slippery sound of pronouncing Sara as it stands there a lone in its brevity sleek and as I think the chick be in her ways...

simply complex

Posted 7 Years Ago


Though this is not entirely what I like to call 'poetry', it has a silent power - and I love the way it LOOKS.

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Dallas, TX



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