Spellbound

Enchanted by the moonlit waters,

Entranced by the fiery blaze,

She captivates you,

Shrouded by a purple haze

Charmed by the harmonious rhythm,

Mesmerized by the ringing chime,

She captivates you,

Chanting, It's your time

Allured by the shimmering reflection,

Seduced by the graceful breeze,

She captivates you,

Hands you the keys

Enthralled by a shadowy figure,

Fascinated by the dark silhouette,

She captivates you,

Whispering her last threat

Spellbound

Author's Note

I hope you enjoyed.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

She captivates you ,
Hands you the key.
A nice write.

[The White Wolf]

Ooooh, I love it, it captured me like a siren! This was dark and delighfully wicked and enjoyable to read. Spellbound I was. Great work, friend.

[Raheem Lyttle Kiyaga]

Wow! Great writing I've like your writing and the way you strung your words.

[recantichize]

this is beautiful and mysterious! i enjoy this so much. i do feel that last line of the third stanza interrupts the otherwise meticulous meter and rhythm of the piece. overall, incredible!

[BLBrown]

Wonderful. I love the repetition of "she captivates you." Clever. For flow purposes you might consider starting the last line of all the stanzas with "ing" on the end. So you use the four words: shrouded, chanting, hands and whispering. So maybe change shrouded to "shrouding you in purple haze." And then instead of "hands" say "handing you the keys." Just some thoughts. Good work.

[mariah]

oh my gosh, this is amazing. it flows very well and i love the discriptive words to portray a beautiful, mysterious girl. i love it, great work :)
-Mariah

[Luciole]

This was also quite unique. You had very subtle imagery which which worked well with the brevity of it. Great job!

[Distant horizons]

Well I was gonna comment how spellbinding this was but I thought that might be cheating :-)
Great flow to this. uhm, what's the word? A word that I forget that means smooth and graceful, like elegant, but not elegant. I'll go shut up now :-)

[GirlWithAHeart.]

Love it, your great(:

[Aravind]

I just didn't enjoy it, I got enchanted by the spell that I am now bound from this beautiful poem.