Wonder Lust

Wonder Lust

A Poem by sinNsincerity

You left me breathless

when you asked,

“Do you like my

necklace?,” as

you escalated your

fingers down from

your left collar

bone towards your cleavage.

The center piece...

Heart exceeding because

a dose of you is

extremely needed!

Please my dear, I’m

in dire need

of O D-ing!



© 2015 sinNsincerity



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This piece giggles and staggers to its own satisfaction, yet the fight between punctuation and rhyme is a bit of a distraction. The direction of escalation and its imagery is strong in thought, but the lines surrounding the idea of center and heart could be clearer wrought. There are here in nestled lovely blossoms of poetic bliss, it could have great contentions to be more than a near kiss.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Maybe it that is what it was meant to be? Nothing more than a near Kiss...



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Mmmm really like this Sin. It's simple and direct-- a visceral reaction to a simple action. Only suggestion is to make ODing O. D.ing or O D-ing.It caught me off guard the first time.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

Thank you Jan, I did go on and fix that.
Yea, I just wanted to capture one of those bite your.. read more
JayceeC

2 Years Ago

Very vivid. And yes it is better with the hyphen.
An OD of love, that's how I want to die. Very well done, Sin in Sincerity. :) Rudi

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

As do I Rudi!
Thank you for reading!
I thought this was a clever, promiscuous write. I loved it. Excellent write as always.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

Thank you hon, Always a pleasure!
I liked. Very good. Thanks for sharing

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

Thank you!
I liked this! But a little confused by the second 'you' in line 5 and the 'you' in line 7. Should it be 'your'?

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

Oh yea, thanks for catching that. I just fixed it!
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dan
Overdosing on love...a great name for a rock song. A great idea well written, my friend! take care...dan

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

Thank you Dan!
A great write. I enjoyed reading it.

Posted 2 Years Ago


sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

Thank you!
I always thought the place where your heart is
very much sacred
a window to you
just right there

whether it be a necklace or a hand

touching that place
is the beginning of true love

Real sweet write
Smooth

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

Thank you hon!
Love this! I love the sensual imagery. You are a talented poet. Well done! :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

Thank you, I'm really glad that you enjoyed it!
I wonder if its not a bad idea to O.D. on anything - even our lover then I go nah! I couldnt think of a better person to overdo it with.
Good one Sin. I like the play on words here.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading Anto!

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sinNsincerity

East Los Angeles, CA



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