Wonder Lust

Wonder Lust

A Poem by sinNsincerity

You left me breathless

when you asked,

“Do you like my

necklace?,” as

you escalated your

fingers down from

your left collar

bone towards your cleavage.

The center piece...

Heart exceeding because

a dose of you is

extremely needed!

Please my dear, I’m

in dire need

of O D-ing!



© 2018 sinNsincerity



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Lovely write! Can sense the passion between the lines...

However, I'm not sure whether "escalate" is the right word for what the fingers did......yes, maybe the situation escalated.......and that is quite a pivotal verb in the poem.....so I cannot suggest an alternative, but that's what I got in my first reading.....

Towards the end of the poem, it got a "rap" vibe, where my feet started to tap, but then it stopped.....as if there was more to come....

Great work!

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

6 Months Ago

Escalate as in an escalator. They go up as well as down. Hence her fingers moving downward.
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ummm well its nothing to do with lust to me im gonna say that the best part was the intro and def have potential but step up the word play , i know you have it you hold back but all your pieces are a joy to read i just want to hear the inside version what the originak thought is before you put it through the process of making what you feel is correct speak the soul
good job ,

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you hon, i know what you mean.
Mmmm really like this Sin. It's simple and direct-- a visceral reaction to a simple action. Only suggestion is to make ODing O. D.ing or O D-ing.It caught me off guard the first time.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you Jan, I did go on and fix that.
Yea, I just wanted to capture one of those bite your.. read more
JayceeC

3 Years Ago

Very vivid. And yes it is better with the hyphen.
An OD of love, that's how I want to die. Very well done, Sin in Sincerity. :) Rudi

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

As do I Rudi!
Thank you for reading!
I thought this was a clever, promiscuous write. I loved it. Excellent write as always.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you hon, Always a pleasure!
I liked. Very good. Thanks for sharing

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you!
I liked this! But a little confused by the second 'you' in line 5 and the 'you' in line 7. Should it be 'your'?

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Oh yea, thanks for catching that. I just fixed it!
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dan
Overdosing on love...a great name for a rock song. A great idea well written, my friend! take care...dan

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you Dan!
A great write. I enjoyed reading it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you!
I always thought the place where your heart is
very much sacred
a window to you
just right there

whether it be a necklace or a hand

touching that place
is the beginning of true love

Real sweet write
Smooth

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you hon!
Love this! I love the sensual imagery. You are a talented poet. Well done! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you, I'm really glad that you enjoyed it!

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Added on June 14, 2015
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