Seaside

A day at the beach

Seaside

 

Sand tickles toes

Spray assaults nose

That’s the way the ocean goes

 

Waves crash

Children splash

Seagulls dive to pick up trash

 

Sand castle made

Into water, wade

Footprints, drowned by ocean, fade

 

Greens and blues

White foam brews

Rolling water, gently moves

 

Wave laps

Seaweed taps

Around ankles, tightly wraps

 

Pluck it

Chuck it

Spy a seashell for my bucket

 

Back to land

Lay on sand

‘Til my body is all tanned.

 

Reviews

[ShelleyA]

Hi Sharon. A delightful write about a day at the beach. I love these rhyming triplets. Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this sandy shore filled with summer fun that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye. Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Lovely depth of feeling. You express the fun and relaxation of this day that I can relate to. Good word choice. Well penned. Write on!

[Sharon Kim]

Thank you so much, Shelley!

[Geodan]

It's so cute! I love it! It really impresses me when people write something this happy, as I don't. The imagery is great. I can picture the beach right now. Keep writing!

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Well penned. I felt as though I was at the ocean myself.

[Sharon Kim]

Thank you Sharon!

[Melanie Genevieve]

This makes me happy. It reminds me of a rhyme I might jump rope to as a little girl.

[Sharon Kim]

I'm glad this makes you happy! I see what you mean about the jump rope rhyme! Enjoy your day!