Silent Requiem

Wow. Just wow. I can't believe how well one of my friends can relate to that.
She says that she's not depressed, but I can tell that she is. She won't talk sometimes, which is definitely strange for someone like her. I'm the only person she can talk to about it, because I'm the only person to listen and care enough about it. When she describes it to me, I can almost feel her pain and agony. She portrays it in such a way that I truly feel sorry for her, yet I also feel in awe of how strong she is to not break down under the huge pressure. She reads a lot of depressing and suicidal books, such as Cut, and writes poetry and stories that are certainly very depressing.
The thing that really touched me in this poem is that I can feel the emotions too. There are two ways why I can. One, of course, is that the way you conveyed the feelings in this poem, wording and phrases alike, really brought me into the poem. Also, as the main support for a depressed person, you end up having the same basic feelings as the other person. I feel buried under the pressure of helping her get through her problems.
Once again, I am amazed at your emotional poetry, and I cannot wait until I can read more.
--Solitude

Posted 9 Months Ago

Holy wow. This is so intense.

Posted 3 Months Ago

I was hooked from the first line. " For all your kisses turned to spit" - Brilliant.
Your describe that all consuming feeling of the lonely so well. Dark and deep is this well of thought.

Posted 8 Months Ago

Your writing is just hynotic. The lines here are all so good that I went ahead and read it twice. Such masterful work,I would love to hear you recite. Wonderful...

Posted 8 Months Ago

You so well tell the tale of depression. It is the saddest story that can be written by a human. But to acknowledge that they exist in this state of mind and fight this demon. "Still to swim this river of hope", you so adequately speak for thousands who cannot voice the hurt and deep feeling of loss they are experiencing. But look what you have done with such a dark state of being. You have taken it and become a voice for all that are afraid to speak out. When they read this, they will know that there is at least one person who knows how they truly feel. One small, just one small whispering voice can be a lifeline, it can become the welcome shout in a lonely existence that says "I am here and I too feel your pain, you are not alone in the darkness. I deeply admire this writing and respect you for creating it.

Posted 8 Months Ago

woah so dark and cold
awesome take on depression
the elements are perfect
great imagery and appeal to the senses too


"Frigid black waters
Suffocating to the surface of my skin
Anchored heart drags me under
An all consuming fathom depth undertow"

and

"Left to wander this desert realm of mine
Saddened a horizon distance wide
Falling grains of sand through the hourglass
Bury me alive so deeply in passed time"


(these) just blew me away...
very good, i can really tell for i've been there

Posted 8 Months Ago

Wow, that was so beautiful and dark- twisted. Awesome job ^^

Posted 9 Months Ago

Wow. Just wow. I can't believe how well one of my friends can relate to that.
She says that she's not depressed, but I can tell that she is. She won't talk sometimes, which is definitely strange for someone like her. I'm the only person she can talk to about it, because I'm the only person to listen and care enough about it. When she describes it to me, I can almost feel her pain and agony. She portrays it in such a way that I truly feel sorry for her, yet I also feel in awe of how strong she is to not break down under the huge pressure. She reads a lot of depressing and suicidal books, such as Cut, and writes poetry and stories that are certainly very depressing.
The thing that really touched me in this poem is that I can feel the emotions too. There are two ways why I can. One, of course, is that the way you conveyed the feelings in this poem, wording and phrases alike, really brought me into the poem. Also, as the main support for a depressed person, you end up having the same basic feelings as the other person. I feel buried under the pressure of helping her get through her problems.
Once again, I am amazed at your emotional poetry, and I cannot wait until I can read more.
--Solitude

Posted 9 Months Ago

As we swim a river of sinking hope, we are caught in that black pit of depression that overwhelms the good and brightness of that which we know as joy. You have conveyed such feelings in a way that reaches in and grabs the spirit with expert imagery!
Depression is not a good state of mind, but we all go there at some point in our lives! For some, the visit is brief, but for others, it may seem as it the stop is for eternity.
I especially can relate to the final two lines of your write....falling grains of sand through the hourglass
bury me alive so deeply in passed time....yes, that is a well termed description of hopelessness.

Posted 9 Months Ago

An excellent description of depression. That last stanza was my favorite. It knocked the ball out of the park so to speak.

Posted 9 Months Ago