Eternal Twilight

Guide me into the light,

Where I can roam in peace.

Guide me into darkness,

For I can be what I am.

Guide me into happines,

For I am just a man.

Guide me into depression,

For I want ignorance to be gone.

Guide me into the waterefall,

For my thirst for life is needed.

Guide me into fire,

For the great power I lust.

Guide me into solitude,

For I wish to harm no one.

Guide me into hate,

For I seek revenge towards Thee.

Guide me into life,

For my love is yet to be.

Guide me into death,

For war I can not win.

Reviews

[Ascending]

Great poem. I enjoyed how this poem was set-up. Each and every your poems I read it seems like I getting to know the writer a little bit better. Of course, his poem has a dark feel to it. That's why I read your poems. To get away from the love and angst poems,in which I do love to read. This poem's dark element is beautiful and the words the writer used matched it's beauty. I bow, in respect, to you.

[forevermore1218]

great poetic setting to place and describe a perfect atmosphere into a poem. The only advice I have for you is to maybe make each four lines into verses with a space in between. It tends to catch the reader's eye more when the poetry is something like that.

Example:

Guide me into the light,
Where I can roam in peace.
Guide me into darkness,
For I can be what I am.

Guide me into happines,
For I am just a man.
Guide me into depression,
For I want ignorance to be gone.


Other then that, the poem was really powerful and I really enjoyed feeling the powerful aura from reading this poem.

Great job ma friend :)

[Ellie Howard]

powerful

[TC Dunn]

such powerful lines. Love the "Guide me into hate for I seek revenge towards Thee." This is definitely some strong writing. It moved me. Great job. I look forward to reading more of your work.

[K.C. Zbryk]

Absolutly amazing man, the simple structure of this pulls the reader into the piece and by the end it leaves the reader thirsting for more. I love the format you chose for this piece and the word choice is amazing. Phenominal poetry man. I cant wait to read more.

[Mikayla Rasmussen]

I've always been a fan of repeating poems and people say they are so easy and not hat hard to write but i think it takes skill to get it right so that the repeating is not over worked and it just flows together and doesn't get annoying.

That's what your poem is like, it works so well with the repeating, it was something that kept in rhythm really well without having to rhyme, i could just keep on reading it over and over again.
it is perfect!

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Awesome poem, bro! It describes a person's desires (perhaps even complexes) pretty well.
"Guide me into hate, For I seek revenge towards Thee." explains that you are referring to God, and adds a bit of a blasphemy to the poem - but I consider it to be a strong tool to express the power of your/the narrator's emotions.
All in all, a fine piece! :D