Choices and Butterflies

it  was a magical space we found and hung

around,

each day along the path at half past five,

beside the second tree on the right hand side

high anticipation returned 

and life was as it was,

we were brand new again

life was restored.

butterflies danced 

while the leaves hummed a quiet song

once again, we had purpose

once again, we were infused with strength

and could not fail

we would not fail

time and life prepared us for this day

together, we would win this race

fly past those treacherous souls 

who thought otherwise

we would show them

we would win

how could I have known

your view of me

hadn't changed

after all this time

our roads were one and done,

years ago.

and I?

a inconvenient afterthought....

Reviews

[Breanna.Pratt]

I like the rhyming in the first two lines of the first stanza. I like the poem itself overall but I appreciate the structure and lack of punctuation of the poem. The staggered line lengths, the lack of capital letters, commas, and periods, all make the poem unique and make the story its telling more meaningful. I also like the "..." at the end of the last line, it leaves the reader thinking about their own personal experiences.

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, Breanna for your kind words and thoughts. I will be by soon.

Alisa

[Corset]

After all this time you would think at the very least they would at last appreciate our tenacity :D

[Davidgeo]

Well done.

You write like me, mechanically speaking.

As any good narcissist would say; excellent work, but you better not get better than me or I'll kidnap all of your pets and sell them to the circus.

[Alisa Js]

lol

Thanks, JD

I will be by soon to check out your work.

Alisa