(I want to) Love You

A woman is looking at her husband of twenty five years and thinking of what to say at the ceremony to renew their vows when she remembers what she told him to make him propose to her.

Kiss me.
make my pain go away...
answer my doubts,
scare away the fear.
just hold me.
Tell me that I'm not alone.
Secure my insecurities...
Talk to me,
give me your problems.
Borrow my strength..
come to me
so I can see who you are;
I will destroy your demons.
Let me Kiss you.
Let me make your pain go away.
Let me answer your doubts.
Let me hold you...
I want you to know that you're not alone...
I want to secure your insecurities
I want you to love me
I want to love you

Reviews

[viola]

I finished reading this and just sighed. Someday, I hope someone loves me like that! It was simply lovely.
The only thing I can think of to critique is also the punctuation. It feels a little bit like you randomly picked between, period, ellipses, and semi-colons! Think about how long you want each pause to be.
Again, wow. Thank you. I really enjoyed reading that!

[annalysiar]

No lie I honestly sometimes feel like I do lol I try I really do but I guess it comes out better in my head than on paper.
thank you for reading and enjoying

[viola]

I believe you! Everyone has there own thing that just doesn't make sense to them for some reason! That's what editors are for!

[annalysiar]

Lol thank you😆 you have no idea how much it would help

[Philip Muls]

Well done. In short : talk to me ! You offer reciprocity.

Funny and authentic. I am going on 23 yrs of marriage and this is very recognizable.

[annalysiar]

Thank you for reading my poem

[alifeacoustic]

Great write again Annar. The story of then and now, being who you were and who you are now, together. Superb.

[annalysiar]

Thank you thank you I'm really glad you enjoyed it. It means so much😆

[alifeacoustic]

You're very welcome

[Coyote Poetry]

The words of the vow. Beautiful and perfect. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[annalysiar]

You're welcome coyote I'm glad you enjoyed my poem

[Coyote Poetry]

I did. Beautiful vows for the emotion of love and marriage.

[annalysiar]

Yes I was thinking of my great grandmother who had her marriage for over fifty years.... Its amazing its such a powerful beautiful thing love that's just...misunderstood or underestimated...i can't even grasp it yet..

[Coyote Poetry]

My Grandparent were marry for 65 years. They were my example of true love. Grandfather would shop daily to ensure Grandmother her sweets. We need good examples.

[Richard🖌]

Annar,
I do not know what could be more alluring or satisfying than a poem in homage to the bonding of two lovers into one, and you have most certainly made it a glorious scenario and occasion to witness through the heavenly sensitivity of your beautiful words.
Your first twelve lines are as a tender wedding vow, while the remainder turn to the expression of high passion, indeed.
I like this very much, My Friend, and really have no critique to offer, except you might revisit your punctuation.

This is very good work, Annar, I feel came straight from your heart … thank you so much for the joy of sharing it with you! ⁓ Richard

[annalysiar]

Wow thank you so so much Richard that means very very much to me. Yes I am horrible with editorial issues lol but thank you ahain