The Madness of Morning

A conversation with my demon

Here she is again,

sitting on my bed.

She stares at me,

menacingly,

a twinkle in her eye.

“She can’t be real”.

I’m muttering to myself...

***

“Yet, here I am, everyday,

All set for your mind and I to vie.

If I’m not real,

If I don’t exist,

Then why not make me go?

***

“I try!”, I cry...

“I beg you every day!

I plead with you to set me free!

I take this bolus...

The healers…

They promised me!

But here your are...

Fixated on my soul!”

***

She crawls across my bed,

Enjoying this charade.

She awakens the voices

That rest inside my head,

And now... The games begin.

***

“Arise, my demons!

It’s time to play.

Our friend right here

Is crumbling, you see...

Let us soothe her mind.”

***

“No, no,” I plead,

“Let's not today.

My heart is weak.

It’s filled with pain.

This game we play…

I can’t endure!

Please let my body rest”

***

I pull out my bottle,

The new pill prescribed

It promised relief

from visions unreal.

I pull off the cap.

I swallow one down.

***

I hear the girl cry.

The voices protest.

The noise is subsiding,

My heart feeling free.

Finally... Sweet reality...

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Even with the 'sweet reality' of the finale, this is incredibly chilling and intense...I take a lot of meds for a lot of different things, so this piece just hit me like a ton of bricks...wow...I could easily imagine this being acted out on a stage...

“Yet, here I am, everyday,

All set for your mind and I to vie.

If I’m not real,

If I don’t exist,

Then why not make me go?

That stanza made me gulp...amazing work...you definitely gripped me with this one :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and giving such positive feedback. I too, suffer from a mental illness and am currently fighting for disability. One thing that helps keep me going is my writing and knowing that some of the most creative people in the world suffered as we do.

[kublakhan27]

I know just how you feel...I was actually just finishing a piece that veers a bit into the same territory...always a pleasure :)

[Sarah Lynn]

Woah! Intense ! I must say this was an excellent poem!

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you so much :D

[Sarah Lynn]

You're very welcome !(:

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, and enjoy the neo Raphaelite graphic that perfectly frames it !

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[hardeep sabharwal]

marvelous, I love your words in this deep and intense poem,
as for as title,, present title is more apt than the previous one :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you so much. Ya I need to take that part off. I no longer am on the fence. I like the new title better too!

[Hitchhiker]

Oh hell yes. Bring on the pills. I take my fair share of them, otherwise I would be kaput. But back to your excellent poetry. I know first hand about the demons who reside inside our thoughts, my friend. I dealt with them, or rather they dealt with me for many, many years. I beat them though. By myself. Without the need for pills, except to be able to get my mind and my physical body ready for the challenge. On that grand day I am talking about I forgave everyone in my life who needed forgiveness, and then, and this was the hardest, I forgave myself. Forgiving myself was the key to making everything else work, and I had a lot to forgive. I no longer have my demons, they are gone. How is it possible to forgive oneself? Like this. The things I forgive myself of happened a long time ago. It dawned on me that I wasn't the same person now than I was then. So if I was not the same person I was able to forgive that other me. It may not work for anyone else, but I think it will. Sorry I took up so much time and space here.

[Briana O'Connor]

No need to be sorry. Poetry is meant to spark emotion, memories and sensations. The fact that you could resonate with this piece so much means I'm doing my job as a write :P lol

[Hitchhiker]

Yep, you certainly did your job on this one.

[MomzillaNC]

As dark and gothic as this write feels, the ending is actually a great moment of gratitude for the help meds (or whatever reaches the tormented). Well done.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[Ashira Macy]

I think I read the first version of this and loved it, but I can tell you tightened it up this time. Really fantastic work on this, I have always loved the premise. Beat those demons down, they don't deserve to torment you. Prove that you are stronger than their army!

[Einstein Noodle]

my demons and angels wake me around 2-3 am .. this struggle is not experienced only by those who feel it more intensely .. i think we all have these same kinds of battles .. i have close friends who struggle daily ... thank the good Lord for all medications that can get us thru .. tho they present their own set of challenges ... i read the featured review and your reply but did not need to, to be able to see that your poem is personal .. the honesty and clarity in your poem adds power and emotion ..
E.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you so much for reading. I believe that all writers have a little bit of insanity within them, which is what brings out the brilliance of creativity.

[Tricia Pattinson]

I found t100his compelling, emotional and very well written. Thoroughly enjoyed the dramatic expression!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much :D

[TL Boehm]

found this intriguing. Perhaps the second title works better here because its a bit shorter as far as what shows in the live feed.
Beyond that, this had a great surreal chill to it. Those things that haunt us inside our heads. That's real horror. Well penned.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much for your feedback. much appreciated

[Mayank]

It just made me wonder what all I have not tried, all sort of pills which could lock me up and those hallucination were just terrible.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for taking the time to read. try not to let your mind wonder too much