Chameleon

It's another version of something I had to do for creative writing.

She casts such a thin shadow,

behind the eyes of those around her.

She's speak loudly what she wants to say,

but it only comes out a whisper. 

She's like that one last ember to die,

hanging on to life more than ever. 

She cries but no one sees,

she laughs but no one cares.

The full moons in her eyes are now waning,

while she's stuck fading.

She knew she'd have to face this horrible fate,

to see her one true mate. 

"I've looked for thee and now you're here" 

"I have come for you my dear" 

the words she longs to hear,

tangled in the web of life,

through the stars of the universe. 

Such a lonely girl she stands,

casting such a thin shadow.

She longs to take in ones true grin,

but hides like the little chameleon. 

Reviews

[dovetailer]

well crafted poem...but one question I had was why it would be a horrible fate to see her one true mate?

"I've looked for thee and now you're here"
"I have come for you my dear"
the words she longs to hear,
tangled in the web of life,

this feels like wonderful longing...not a terribly feared outcome...

She seems like a wallflower...unnoticed...inconspicuous...blends into the background like a chameleon...yet she's longing for her one true love...resigned to worship from afar to use an old cliche...

I would suggest having us feel unrequited longing instead of consummate dread or insecurity...which I do feel...if this is your intent, then the poem works for me...

[pinpen]

Such a depth in self description, Amazingly done.

[ATG]

A very interesting poem. Overall it was well written and there were no obvious errors. I got a good sense of someone being ignored by others from this poem.

[shoaib]

beautiful work and words :)

[Alicia™]

Hm, I like this one… It's definitely interesting and well written. Good job.

[Adam :P]

liked this one, but hides like the little chameleon, wonderful.

[Hippy]

its nice it is a good description of blending in and not being noticed

[Marie Harrison]

Scary, many things I see in myself each day. A great poem for self reflection. Thanks for sharing.

[Bard Constantine]

Good description of the wallpaper personality... a chameleon that fades in the background instead of standing out. An apt metaphor for insecurity and shyness... which I endured through much of my youth. Nice work...