Are we alone?

Are we alone?

A Story by AaronFreitas
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Real short true story... this was me last night.

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I could feel it… she was standing there watching me as I slept. Subconsciously I awoke to ask her if everything was ok but she didn't respond. I rolled over and looked up to see her shadow... she looked me in my eyes then walked away. Sometimes I forget I live alone but in reality we are never really alone are we?

 


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alf
Hi Aaron. I am not a great fan of prose in poetry, and so very seldom read it. You have written well and it was a pleasant read, but personally, I think that format lacks punch. I did love the wording, you got it right !!! just . . . I'm into structure, not reading books, I guess, alf

Posted 2 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I hear ya buddy... I just had to get out what happened to me when I woke up... true story lol. Than.. read more
alf

2 Years Ago

Cool!! I'll keep reading your writes!!!!
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you buddy I appreciate that



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I really like this piece :D

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you... and it's a true story... one of my crazy nights in this house I live in :)
Loved the simplicity of the poem.Did it really happen?? It is hard to believe,especially for me,since I don't believe in such things.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

yes it did... I know what I saw and it scared the s**t out of me haha... enough to have a bottle of .. read more
Mayank Sharma

2 Years Ago

😂
Yes I truly saw her also one night she was watching me and she was wearing a mini skirt then with needles I poke her eyes and her hair fell off and now her head turned bald and skully with sockets where her eyes used to be and now she can only hear me

Now I sleep with a baseball bat next to my bed in case the lesbian demoness wants to get near first base so that I could smash her bones

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Lmao that's classic! I can't lie I have a baseball bat by my bed too lol... thanks for your review .. read more
Haunting's are so hard to prove to outsides, could it be because they happen in the mind first? I know my mother is with me as well as a sister and many friends though they no longer walk the earthly plain, so the answer to your question is NO we are never really alone! Thanks for making my memories of loved ones even stronger with your poem, Standing O my friend!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

We never are really alone. I think I some more of these stories to share with the cafe... I just go.. read more
This is excellent Aaron, short, but very clean and sharp - says what it needs to and reads smoothly. Almost like the beginning of a good short story or even a novel. I like that very much, it has great intrigue in that short paragraph, makes the reader want to read more. I'm wondering now, what could be coming next???!! :o0

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I've been thinking of expanding on this since it did so well and I got good reviews :) If I do more.. read more
Suzy Hazelwood

2 Years Ago

Yes, please do, I'd be very interested to see where it goes.
This short piece is well described and you have captured the emotion of that experience well and succinctly Aaron

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you John... sometimes it's hard to describe what we don't know... this was all I could do :)
Liked this a lot, I agree with your message

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Erin :)
I think we are what our mind allows us to be....indeed we're not alone, yet can we handle the ''company'' though.....a thought full write

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Ana! I am so glad to see you back on here... I did miss you my friend and noticed you gon.. read more
Ana B.

2 Years Ago

Thank you for the warm welcome my friend, and yes, you're right....minds are a scary thing....but i'.. read more
"are we alone?" That is a question with an answer which we all are waiting for.... Interesting little poem ..
Good job :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you.... I know we aren't... some of the stuff I've see is proof of other things in this world .. read more
OH GOD.. It reminds me of the Film "oculus " It is a horror movie. Amazing write. Simply, you have described the situation.. Umm I would say, PERFECTLY! :) Good luck :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Destiny Dreamer

2 Years Ago

You are WELCOME! :) You should check it out, it's amazing :)
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I gotta find a friend to watch it with me... I'm a scaredy cat watching scary movies alone lol
Destiny Dreamer

2 Years Ago

lOl.. Same here! :D I watched it with my Brother! :D

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