Are we alone?

Are we alone?

A Story by AaronFreitas
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Real short true story... this was me last night.

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I could feel it… she was standing there watching me as I slept. Subconsciously I awoke to ask her if everything was ok but she didn't respond. I rolled over and looked up to see her shadow... she looked me in my eyes then walked away. Sometimes I forget I live alone but in reality we are never really alone are we?

 


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alf
Hi Aaron. I am not a great fan of prose in poetry, and so very seldom read it. You have written well and it was a pleasant read, but personally, I think that format lacks punch. I did love the wording, you got it right !!! just . . . I'm into structure, not reading books, I guess, alf

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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I hear ya buddy... I just had to get out what happened to me when I woke up... true story lol. Than.. read more
alf

2 Years Ago

Cool!! I'll keep reading your writes!!!!
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you buddy I appreciate that



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Scary stuff. I'd be afraid to stay in the same house if I saw something like that.

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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Haha I guess I am getting used to it... some crazy stuff has happened since I've moved in here. App.. read more
nice especially
Sometimes I forget I live alone but in reality we are never really alone are we?

we are alone somewhere it is what we think but we are not cause god is with us.

nice. Thank you for sharing such a nice piece with us

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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Irenic :) Appreciate your review and feedback.... and no we are never alone :)
irenic

2 Years Ago

Welcome.....................:)
this says alot i think about how our subconscious works
even when those we care about have physically left, they remain in our psyches

as if they were still there

great poem



-Dream

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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Our subconscious does work in mysterious ways. We see things we may not see when we are wide awake .. read more
great Aaron, i remember a while ago seeing a challenge to write a scary story in just one line, yours maybe a longer tale but its amazing how you packed so much fear into so few words, I loved it :)

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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thanks buddy... I should look at more contests find good things to write about. Thanks for the revi.. read more
Nice...very nice! "Subconsciously I awoke to ask her if everything was ok but she didn't respond" Asleep but awake, within the subconscious realm! I would say this was a walk in the in-between world. I love this! So much written in so few words.

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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thats what it felt like... I see movements sometimes when I'm just relaxing at home but this time it.. read more
Jen

2 Years Ago

If I may comment further...never doubt the magical mystical life we exist within, all things are pos.. read more
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Yes there are... I believe that :)
Hey Aaron.

My love for ghosts stories matches my love for super heroes. 😊 this piece definitely has the feel of a story. One that I would like to hear more about. This woman, for example. Was she someone close to him who passed or a spirit trapped in the house that he has come to accept?

You could create a more powerful piece by playing with the word arrangement and selection more. The imagey you are using now is a good starting point.

I hope you will expand on this piece, whether you choose to use a mini story or poetry.


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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

From the reviews it's got me thinking of playing with this more. When I first wrote it I kind of ju.. read more
Michelle Coleman

2 Years Ago

Let me know when you develop this into a story. 😊
I liked this. I lived in a haunted house for twenty years growing up. It was unsettling when I'd hear footsteps downstairs and moving around, call down to my family and then remember no body was home but me at the time... Can be kind of eerie.

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KaoticOrder

2 Years Ago

I'd say just keep an eye out for any aggressive behavior. Some spirits, if not most, are completely .. read more
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Yeah I hear ya... I've witnessed an aggressive one before and it was not fun. I will write about it.. read more
KaoticOrder

2 Years Ago

I'd like to read it. Things like that interest me.
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dan
As long as one possesses a working brain one is never truly alone. A very good point. take care...dan

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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Very good point my friend... thank you for your review buddy :)
That is creepy, especially after just waking up and what is real and unreal is kind of a blur still. *SHUDDERS*

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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Yes indeed... needless to say I was scared in my house alone last night haha... thanks Nadia appreci.. read more
Wow this is beautiful. I love your work Aaron. Always inspiring

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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thanks Shadow Poet... appreciate your compliment :)

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