Trembling

Trembling

A Poem by lee von cleef

Thank you,
Veterans Day,
I always feel today,
Waste and loss,
Peace and gone,
Cool breath encircling the clouds ...
The mountains prayer flags litter the Sky.

© 2014 lee von cleef



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Catching up with your work Lee. Veteran's Day has always been a solemn spectacle for me, too. I always think of days out on Fort Bliss, Fort Sam, Bragg and Drum. Or overseas at camp Silo or God knows what name some hack in an air conditioned room would come up with. I think of suffering. But most of all I think of names like Gottus, Toy, Benoit and First Sergeant So and so, or the sad quiet ones in the corner who never talk, but know, what they are feeling.
Introspective piece, Lee. It made me think. Remember.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lee von cleef

3 Years Ago

Do you think I can drop the last "and"? Ps thank you for stopping by.
Tree

3 Years Ago

Yes. That would work fine..



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brief and beautifully stated.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Short and powerful, I like it. Especially the "cool breath" line.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Catching up with your work Lee. Veteran's Day has always been a solemn spectacle for me, too. I always think of days out on Fort Bliss, Fort Sam, Bragg and Drum. Or overseas at camp Silo or God knows what name some hack in an air conditioned room would come up with. I think of suffering. But most of all I think of names like Gottus, Toy, Benoit and First Sergeant So and so, or the sad quiet ones in the corner who never talk, but know, what they are feeling.
Introspective piece, Lee. It made me think. Remember.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lee von cleef

3 Years Ago

Do you think I can drop the last "and"? Ps thank you for stopping by.
Tree

3 Years Ago

Yes. That would work fine..
Somehow I missed this one, but still want to say how much it is appreciated!! It is a feeling many of us have as we tremble at the thought of the sacrifices made for us!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So few words yet so much said. We see a lot of remembrance day poems, this one however stands out from the crowd because you have used so few words but said so much, well done indeed!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lee von cleef

3 Years Ago

thank you very much on the move now but soon I should return.
TrimarcoRansome

3 Years Ago

You are very welcome!
There is a lot said here in a few words with more than is apparent being less than obvious on the surface.
An extraordinary write from the heart.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yes, thankfully there are things larger than us. Great write.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Powerful...
In concise form you have touched heaven with potent and deserved words
x

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wonderful Lee........Veterans Day tribute.....:)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

well put lee von cleef ... hopefully not a waste
perhaps some day greed, avarice and killing subsiding will allow one to be less defensive of ones home.

your last line is absolutely stinging ... to the marrow ..

E.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Good morning,Thank you for stopping by. I like to write,I like to layer a story into a poem,I want to crack through to the reader,add emotion to life, theirs and mine. more..

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