The Nature of Life

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Turquoise blue seas flow against the coarse sand

Windows of clear glass defend the frail light

Man's sanguine blood stains the gory land

A veil of stars illuminates the night

Cerulean skies rise over the day

An equilibrium of life and death

Amidst the pitch black dark shadows prey

Reeping the heart of every last breath

Heart wrencing agony; blistering pain

The final remnants of wanton hope

Washed away by the ever falling rain

Leaving behind souls with limited scope

The sun's last dance on an amethyst sky

Disperses events with one final cry

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Reviews

[Ruby Moon]

very vivid... but somehow, i feel as though there is something beneath the surface... something i cant yet grasp

[A]

Very nice, and very fun to read. The wording was smooth, and bold at the same time. Very nice. xP

[LlamaLord]

This really beautiful! The wording flows brilliantly. I think that is one of the main reasons I enjoyed this piece so much. I could read this very fluently because it has the a perfect rhyme scheme. Very nicely written! Thanks for sharin :D

-Austin

[Donovan "Grey Wolf" Go..]

wow amazing, the wording is perfect,It was awsome

[Alexander Z. Anthony]

Hey, very nice! I enjoyed that emensly.
From reading this and other poems of yours I notice your large vocabulary. lol
I may need to go look a few words up!
Great descriptions!
There is almost a sadness emitting from this work, yet i think that is what you were shooting for.
Anyway, good job, kudos and I look forward to reading future works!
-Azza

[Meghan]

It was ver complex and beautiful. Your writing is fantastic!

[Ramza]

I can easily say that your word choice was excellent, it paints vivid images. Continuing on that note I noticed you chose some more complex words rather than the obvious simple one syllable words. But I just want to say sometimes those simple words say it all, that's just a reminder b/c the diction here was just fine.

On a separate note I can't help but feel a vibe of sadness from the piece, and because I assume that was your intention good job for getting that across.

Good luck with other writings.

[Requs]

I'll say for your choice of an overly general topic, you narrowed down to the what it seems to be your favorite aspects. And worded the way you would word it, that is the way poetry is written
-correctly
thumbs up
-matt

[Char]

I have a poetic interest toward anything having to do with nature, so naturally I like this poem :)
Quite niceee.

[Sseoni]

I loved your poem! Absolutely amazing! I loved the way you worded everything! Great use and variety of words! The details, descriptions, everything was great! Wonderful poem! :D