that thing that goes round and round

that thing that goes round and round

 

 

cotton candy kisses,

on the Ferris wheel of love

you held my hand and i bit my tongue

 

wanting that embrace on the top of the Empire State Building

in a carnival dream

i closed my eyes as we spun out of control

i felt your breath in the eye of my sky

a dark night's lingering

another ticket, another ride

 

then i woke up as we disembarked

still feeling your hand in mine

even though 50 years had passed

and knew your beauty would persevere

for one more ride,  

 

if only the tickets were still redeemable...

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/9/16

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Some moments...and some people....are frozen in time in our memories. Thing is, time does change everything and that embrace atop the Empire State Building could now be someone jumping off the top of the Empire State Building just to escape. :) Great metaphor. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you again for your kind review, and insightful words, my friend.

j.

[James]

"If only tickets were still redeemable..." That's a great way to end this. A great story Jacob. Love, wonderfully fascinating in the beginning, but if it's with the right person it will last a lifetime. And, isn't funny how we never forget that feeling when it was fresh and new, still feeling that hand in ours. Nice, I really enjoyed this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, James,
j.

[gabrielle]

They say that being in love keeps you young :). This piece reminded me of those precious teenage years.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your visit, gabrielle...

j.

[Clara]

Love is definitely a ride, but a long beautiful and lasting love, well, that's a ride of a lifetime.
With this nostalgic write, you took me back in time to a place I'd forgotten.

It was magical and wondrous.
I wish "the tickets were still redeemable" too.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your relating to this poem, Clara...

j.

[MomzillaNC]

“i felt your breath in the eye of my sky”

I love the imagery of that line! Beautiful and nostalgic write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Momzilla.

j.

[MomzillaNC]

yvw :D

[h d e rushin]

I remember that song by the 60s R&B group Blue Magic, "Side Show":

"It'll only cost you 50 cents to see,
what love has done to those like you and me".

if only the tickets from the past were redeemable for the present. What a song. What a poem. What a message.

dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love those two lines from that song...thank you for sharing them..and for your kind words, on the poem, dana.
j.

[Zahra]

this is very strong, nostalgic and profound. beautiful write .

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Zahra...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Nostalgia for the past -- beautiful and poignant piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, KL...
j.

[LostBoy]

Sob-stuff trash swathed in intelligent ways or words though good stuff still.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, River...

j.

[Chris]

Lives like that give all of us "hope"... the world isn't a different place now - is just too many have their heads in a wrong place ...now.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and wonder how long the heads will stay there.

j.