a tryst indited in senryu

a tryst indited in senryu

second degree burns

from your consummate  kisses

lips don't want to heal

exploratory

arriving at your neckline

advancing to depths

the maneuvering 

balanced near the precipice

i fall into you

sighs and cigarettes

smoke rings of contentment waft

moments replayed

erin-cilberto

7/24/17

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

This is a hot quartet Jacob - I can't condone smoking though so perhaps the first senryu should be turned down a notch lol.
Awesome and beautifully adroit.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are too funny....thank you, Tony.
j.

[Stella Armour]

love these Jacob, sensual senryu... whatever next lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Stella....

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

well done ..especially like the first one ..nicely connected and in a logical order ..if there can be such a thing in a passionate tryst ;) i put these in me o' library so i can easily replay the moments :))))
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E.
j.

[Sundara Mani]

Difficult for a poetry dud for me to understand. But i like the meter and the mood very much

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Sundara.
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Passionate and perfect Senryu.. evocative, sensuous.."smoke rings of contentment waft"...fade to black...Well-penned!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Annette...glad you could appreciate this piece.
j.

[Chris]

The ever ..."afters"
are a true life('s)long cliche`
of treasured moments...

Heat with heart

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris....
j.