He is ether and I am earth

A union of eathly and heavenly soul

 What should he be?

He should be celestial and intangible

For the rest of those earthly beings,who are not "me"

He should be the one leaning down upon those heavenly bars

Overlooking the earth,ocean and me

His hazel eyes can meet my chocolate brown

I will have no regrets,even if I bleed

This blood should charge up his frangible veins

Keeping in view what a heavenly being should he be

He shouldn't be like the stars twinkling above my head,trying to decorate my strands

Because they are just the night-showpieces which fade and blur in the daylight

He should be a planet orbiting a constellation of defrosting blaze

An incense-bearing aurora filled with galaxy kisses and cosy embrace

He can descend on this earth and spend time with me;

A time that is not physical but purely psychological in category

Even when he leaves back for heaven at the end of the day

I will miss him by glancing at the moon glued to the black casements

The earth will move but never thwart the bookmark which my earth and his ether has created

This will remain in the book of love until a couple like us will be created

I will be able to discern his silhouette in the rings of Jupiter,

Far from the golden sun,yet keeping our love warmer

He is an exotic resident of the silver milky way,

A beautiful scenery;a gravity reborn everyday

The sky's daily chore to kiss him is a must

He and me are at the center of space's heavenly dust.

Author's Note

many writers have described the beauty of a girl in details but let us describe the charm of a boy,a lover who is in no way ordinary.EVen if ordinary,doesn't seem like one.

Reviews

[DedPoet]

Great depth in yourwords . Plenty of passion, it doesn't roll along as smoothly as it can though. Still the metaphorical usage is phenomenal, though they do not tie together as well as they could be. Either way, you have deep talent and passion I believe like my ancestral Latino poets have. Enjoyable, still with your talent for words it would be a an injustice to you if I did not tell you I believe you can do even better. And this piece is already above average than most, I just think you could be great!!

[fattycbreezy52]

Thanks for an ambivalent response. I appreciate that. I will always strive for betterment. Keep these kind words intact:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha FCB none of us could match up to this job description! You describe this celestial lover in such romantic and fantasising tones and paint a heavenly picture of your desire. One very tiny fly in this ointment was for me the use of the word 'created' twice in stanza 6?

[fattycbreezy52]

Aha! A very nice review and yes, I noticed the tautology now. This is one of my very first creations.The beginning of my writings on WC..So such mistakes are likely. But I am grateful that you have pointed it out. It's a positive thing. Thanks for the lovely review:)

[Robert]

Written very well, I especially like the line "His hazel eyes can meet my chocolate brown" This person didn't seem ordinary through your eyes and expressed to us in this piece. You have accomplished what you set out to convey in this piece.

[fattycbreezy52]

Wow..your review echoes my triumph to a great extent. I am glad:)
I only wish that the reality would have been as amazing as the fiction which I conjured up in this poem:)

[Robert]

Ok that made me laugh. Thanks.

[~]

A beautiful description of a man that has a special space, and place. When we see through the eyes of our love, we are always seeing perfection.
:D

[fattycbreezy52]

Haha yes. I haven't seen that,yet.But one day, hopefully:D
Thanks for the review; )