~ lost wildflowers

neath a shady bloom

lost wildflowers

        neath closed windows,

                       dither'd  bloom's shudder

               wilting in arrested fantasies

rhythm  of sun's betrayal

          faded in interruption's tune

   essence'd fragrance

              fallen beneath the cracks,

        no escaping rhymes's paradoxical roots

           sway'd under a moon's dark melody

maestro's scathing notes conduct'd

        keys of C major's dusky tunes

                 F sharp's inauthentic glow

    sans relief from brutal digging

      mortification's dirty little secret

  buried deep within soil'd cover 

              wither'd on the vine 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Sonus de Animus]

This poem captures the music in words, which is no easy feat. I am glad you included the music along with your poem, it was great to see your thought process in an otherwise thoroughly sensual poem. The visualization was great; the almost giddy babble of eloquent words and phrases such as "rhythm of sun's betrayal". This line flows so well and ties in with the feeling of a flower waving and bending under the hot sun in a field.
I won't try to over-interpret it, because to figure out the poem's meaning to a T would be to destroy it, but even without meaning it is a beautiful read. Great poem, every word was almost tangible.

[Frieda P]

Thank you so much for such an in-depth review, thrilled you enjoyed.

[Linda alexander]

So beautifully written, every lines stand out, loved it

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Linda.

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, take care

[Scott Metro]

Damage fantasies in B sharp.
Nice...

Scotty
xo

[Frieda P]

Why didn't I think of that?? Thanks Scotty! x

[Rita L. Sev]

Lyrical, employing your gift for such simple yet elegant images. A beautiful piece, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Rita.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Picturesque quality amalgated with lyrical character -this poem is a beauty to behold.. took me back to the romantic age of poetry.Magnification of your thoughts when the flower withers under the scorching heat of sun and finally falls to be buried in the soil..I also guess it may have some deep underlying meaning too- like transient life which withers away in the sands of time.. Lovely work Freida ;)

~Sophy

[Frieda P]

Thanks for such an animated review Sophy, muchly appreciated. :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

De nada ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

A very melancholy vibe to this, especially coupled with the song. Some really nice lines, especially the sun's betrayal -- such weightiness to this line -- one thing, with your apostrologic, should essence'd be essenc'd or just essenced ?

[Frieda P]

Snagged! Thanks KL, how did I ever live without you before? ;)

[anne]

Song like...flowing and rythmic with many powerful words.....extremely nice..

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much anne...

[anne]

my pleasure......

[PoeticParadox]

I am absolutely in love with the diction of this piece. Very powerful words, you've given enormous meaning to a small collection of words.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for this glowing review, muchly appreciated.

[Kaitlynn A. Black]

Amazing! Your words are filled with soft and clear images that really wrap around the reader in my opinion. I loved the line with the word "dither'd" =) It reminded me of how a turkey might feel knowing it's going in for thanksgiving dinner.
I like how you wove music and tone into the piece too. It really brings across the feel of some lonely place in the cracks of society, a feeling of isolation and age expiring, the heat of the summer beating down with the water dried and away, not wishing to play with that small little plant.

Thanks for sharing!
Hugs! - Kate

[Frieda P]

Ha turkey part made me laugh, thanks so much for your lovely thoughts Kate!

[Sasha]

Beautiful Music..
Beautiful writing !