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Dark Lights ...collaboration with Zahra

Dark Lights ...collaboration with Zahra

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

Dark Lights

Roses  - beauty entangled
with mortality
a promise of wrath and passion both

thorns project
 a reminiscence of woe 
holding on faithfully
to all the moments of rapture

piercing hands bleeding red

her jewelry are vines and moss
swaying in breezes moving 

where does evil come from?

her hips 
along the river's bending
surface waters rich skimmed with 
milk and midden
blurring the deep and powerful
meant to grab, hold and force into
darkness below the surface  

Fountains 
- her endless grace flowing,
taking away the spirits of soil and leaves
to a dream of rebirth

pools below gather beasts
choosing  frenzy but
one swims ....
family sinking deep in the bed load

 cobra hiss spitting
 bob weaving and
caught in the swaying
we ....

boughs of iron oak
bending breezes 
web snaring ...
catching 
holding


© 2017 Einstein Noodle



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they could have been so calm, so serene---but then there was the Garden...the tree of knowledge---and the reality of life afterward...
life is thorns and passion, love and hate, sweet nectar and poison...all at once---
carefree left when God said "everybody out of the pool"
we all need to find the perfect fig leaf so we can cover just enough of ourselves to keep our dignity through life.

j.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

ahahahaha right you are jacob....love your take on this ..i have a smile to last the day now...throu.. read more
Zahra

8 Months Ago

Loved the 'everybody out of the pool' bit. Thank you jacob :D



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This takes me on an interesting journey that feels ethereal & fleeting, as the imagery shifts along the way. At first I felt the thorns grabbing tight but then there's a "letting go" flow in mid-poem, only to return to grabbing ensnarement at the end. Could be an analogy for how some relationships evolve . . . *sigh!* Fondly, Margie

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

yes ..it could Margie ... for sure .. thank you for taking time to read and review .. its important .. read more
Wonderful collaborative write, something dark, something light...beautiful language, form, flow cadence, imagery of both sides of nature and life. Love this!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

thanks dear friend! so glad you stopped to read and leave a review ... and so glad you like it :))read more
Very powerful collaboration.
Quite apt I read it today.
Darkness really is the world just now.
It's like we get drip fed it everyday.
But light will surely shine.
It always does.


Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

i could not agree more Paul.... sometimes it is kind of scary to think about ... history has some ve.. read more
Paul Bell

9 Months Ago

You's did well.
"along the river's bending
surface waters rich skimmed with
milk and midden
blurring the deep and powerful"

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"away the spirits of soil and leaves
to a dream of rebirth"


Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A beautiful integration of two wonderful poets to leave a lasting impression on the reader. Dark lights are becoming an intrigue to explore and behold. Bravo.......

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sami Khalil

9 Months Ago

You are welcome compellingly.
Zahra

9 Months Ago

Thanks so much, Sami! :)
Sami Khalil

9 Months Ago

You are welcome.
a duet of a poem with so many original metaphors of note and a heap of pathos,

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

you heard us didn't you sir!? ... thanks so much for taking time and commenting ..vey gratifying my .. read more
Collaborations so often end up being a competition between two writers or another kind of battleground. But with this piece, you and Zahra have created a passionate intrigue in the finest language two heart-based writers can blend.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zahra

9 Months Ago

Thanks so much emma xoxo
emmajoy

9 Months Ago

My absolute pleasure, the collaboration is grand.
Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

thanks emma! from me too! Zahra and i have done 4 or 5 now together ..always a treat and inspiring e.. read more
Cool drum n bass music... yes, roses are iconic of romance, the passion and the pain

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

thanks Tomas ... so nice to have your review ... yes, iconic .. :)
E.
The red of roses is so reminescent of passion but also of wrath. Such is the calling of a thorn, even though a symbol of woe, to encase the seat of rapture. "Her hips, along the river's bending"... pure poetry in motion. My compliments to both the awesome poets for creating this rich, vividly stunning piece of poetry. Loved it to bits, dear Zahra & E. ❤

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

9 Months Ago

Indeed, writing beautiful poetry with a friend is so uplifting. It was such a pleasure to read Zahra.. read more
Zahra

9 Months Ago

True that. And thanks again :)
Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

thanks DIVYA! your review is wonderfully encouraging.
E.

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