Deleted People

What happened

how did you come to this

did no one ever love you

 

A child born into chaos

raised in a culture of hate

read only one book

 

Bestial faced clerics

spewing twisted words

that no prophet would sanction

 

Fed on a diet of loathing

for places and people

they will never know

 

Hidden behind

blacker than blackest veils

belts and vests assembled to kill

 

What paradise do you think awaits

when you’re in pieces

and drenched in blood

Reviews

[Carol Cashes]

I, too, liked the title choice. And you painted the picture of the children born or sworn into this hateful state quite deftly. Well done.

[MCS]

Thank you for the read and feedback, it concerns me greatly how devalued life has become

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

It is sad when societies use their children to war and kill. Any society. Indoctrination, "brainwashing" happens everywhere..right under our noses. What can be done? No more. No more.....

[MCS]

Thank you for reading Annette, it’s sad how many things have been devalued including life itself.

[duff]

Your title choice kicks things off because these cowards need to be deleted and should. You can feel the anger seething in your words and rightly so. Soft target seeking scumbags. I like your closing lines. You wrap it up with an intense image. Great writing and a pleasure to take part in.

[rowan.taylorrr]

this is really sad. there is a lot of emotion in this piece and i really enjoyed it

[MCS]

Than you for that. There is death on both sides of the line and I'm asking why, what for.

[emmajoy]

The past few weeks in the UK have proved every single letter, thought, finding of your wonderful though tragic writing. Our world is toppling into space... there 's no 'long live civilisation' any more.

Fine writing. Wish i could applaud its content.

[MCS]

Emma, thank you. What's happened there leaves me and many others sad beyond words. If we don't stop now we will all be doomed.

[emmajoy]

I hate to agree but. .. have cried so many tears recently.. not merely for the UK but all over the world.

[MCS]

It's so hard not to cry, with all those lives cut short

[emmajoy]

So true. Think we need to find hope and strength now, find a way to help ourselves and others without causing more mayhem. Maybe the cure is from within... ?

[MCS]

Be the change you want to see, I think that's how it goes

[emmajoy]

I do try, truly do. Sometimes rant on, nudging and the like, both on and off line. People can be so apathetic though.. how many time have i heard, 'But what can one person do... ?' True to some extent, yes.. but what's the saying, 'Where there's a will, there's a way.'

[MsJewel]

Powerful and haunting writing. Very well done. Julie

[MCS]

Julie, lovely to see you. Thank you for reading.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I totally agree with you and your message. You have nailed it on the head. Excellent...:).................

[keith]

a strong condemnation of the evil intent that runs rampant in today's world
done without a broad brush stroke that zeros in on the guilty party

well done and strong indeed
we should all be so brave

[MCS]

Thank you my friend. Evil is so exhausting.

[MCS]

The problem with the world today is that fools and fanatics are so certain of themselves.